finally, movement

finally, movement

 

 

 

the heart seal broken

pressure pantomime leaks out

silent love gestures

 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

11/18/15

Reviews

[Firebird]

I'm glad! This is a clever short poem. So different to mine but in the end we all want the same thing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Firebird.

j.

[Jimmy Yetts]

(Movement is always preferred--especially for a guy my age.)
An exquisitely articulated bit of work, Jacob!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Jimmy.

j.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Love can not be denied, It is stronger than any wall we build around our heart.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

that is so true, Dale...

thank you for the words,

j.

[Jimmy Yetts]

TommyMerton is one harsh toddler!

[Adam Adams]

Interesting.
Another poetry that's damn overwhelmed with vulnerable perspectives of life. Not sure, but .. seemed, you be talking of lost-humanity (the ParisAttacks) or just 'bout love-issues which's goddamn oft. found lost & pretty depressed every singular time in the for of aches, for no reason. So, it might be depicting "finally movement" that comes to numb the heart & soothe the spirit with "speechless speeches" of love. Quite deep but as usual, way thoughtful & generous.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insights, Adams...

j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

Careful you don't spill any of it.

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ha ha...thanks, Al.

j.

[alifeacoustic]

Get out of my head Mr Cilberto. :)
Such intensity with so few words. Superb.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, alife....sorry, i'll get out. :)))))

[rubie]

terrific senryu....

our hearts are always under pressure....

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, rubie.

j.

[Cryingkate]

Ha.
I wonder if you've been watching me cook with the pressure- cooker.
My seal is getting worn out and it' cracking.
Time for a replacement.
I can fix mine, I don't think there is a cure for you. No home remedies or replacement.
I would suggest turning down the flame though. Otherwise those silent gestures can turn full steam and could explode your pot. :-)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ah, such a metaphoric reply....clever.

j.

[Cryingkate]

Thanks.. But I was serious :-)

[annalysiar]

Raw. I like it. That third line wraps it up neatly and nothing else nerds to be said

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, annalysiar...

j.

[annalysiar]

You're welcome