brush fire

brush fire

 

 

in the wilderness of the mind

the lost find solace in a brush of brevity

when thoughts come and go like a newsreel

that flashes waves,

eroding sands, trafficking a current of confusion

 

the compass frozen, direction at an impasse

he blinks, shakes his head,

thinks he remembers a woman

 

but when he reaches the clearing

his GPS deletes his memory

 

and emptiness greets him with a hug

that ignites a feeling of something or someone

                                                    he once knew----

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

11/20/15

Reviews

[rubie]

the last stanza is my favorite....

"emptiness greets him with a hug"....that is such wonderful imagery.

our memories are in constant turmoil, under constant bombardment from stimuli which flashes pictures at us all the time, some with clarity and some with ambiguity.

wonderful write...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful words, rubie.

j.

[Julia Ledo]

The last stanza there really hits. The lost getting no help from what is supposed to orient them back onto the right path, its a wonderful metaphor.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Julia...

j.

[Jimmy Yetts]

Sounds like a GPS-generated lobotomy granting the vague solace of recurring deja vu.
While this interpretation hardly qualifies as accurate, I feel certain it will not be typical.
Intriguing read, Jacob!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and intriguing response, thank you, Jimmy.

j.

[Adam Adams]

So here metaphor's dealing with "mind's" brush fire that ignites his very tender thoughts - the entangle ones - & then accelerate the body to get pleased with warmth. When such warmth gets soothed & settled, he comes to understand or know the real nice flaws - the scars - it may leave around his world so, at least, he decides get his mind "Reset". Kinda deep and very conceptual write! Seemed like a vision that has potential to change things around, in distant blinks.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

really like your insights, Adams....appreciate your reviews...

j.

[alifeacoustic]

This had me remembering scenes from the maze runner, where you are trying to remember paths in the mind that are ever changing and more often than not lead to hazy confusion.
"and emptiness greets him with a hug
that ignites a feeling of something or someone
he once knew"...Beautiful way of putting those pictures that blur, but never quite lose their definition.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, alife....you always render such wise thoughts when you comment.

j.

[Pryde Foltz]

Oh the call of duality … hits you whether you want it to or not. So flashes for me are energetic and it is hard sometimes pin point the source. Wonderful write, Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review and insights, Pryde.

j.

[Valentine]

This is like waking from a good dream only to start forgetting it as you rub your eyes trying to remember. Valentine

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Kathie.

j.

[Weeping willow]

Very nicely expressed,leaves and empty feeling connected to the words;-]

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Weeping Willow.

j.