Tender Time Bombs

Tender Time Bombs

 

 

 

simultaneous shattering

shell-shocked hearts

cracks in the cups of morning

 

a.m. explosions,

sometimes poems,

sometimes they don't survive

sometimes the repercussions

are deep bass barometers 

 

of a world that is too loud

like the "party next door"

to our regrets,

 

that won't let us sleep

with our conscience.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

12/12/15

Reviews

[A hare off]

Those moments between awake and sleep and the opposite where our mind actually has an opportunity to speak to us is when we are reminded of these things that creep into our daily lives and sometimes it is a good conversation and sometimes it is not. Great writing Jacob

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful review, A hare...

j.

[Jimmy Yetts]

Attending enough next-door parties will eventually allow you to sleep with your conscience; it's sharing morning's devastating hangover with a constantly nagging coward-maker that pretty much has no up-side. Unless, I suppose. one considers the survival of an active conscience to be somehow advantageous.
As always, your work says much more than I highlight; indeed, what I highlight is often not even there.
I can only trudge on pretending I'm not trudging.
Your work has insight up the whazoo, Jacob, former Bronxite.
Bronxian? Maybe, Bronxer.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes one of those...i appreciate your kind words...sometimes i get a Bronx cheer, instead.
read moreyes one of those...i appreciate your kind words...sometimes i get a Bronx cheer, instead.

thank you, Jimmy.

j.

[Cryingkate]

By Gosh I think you perfectly described my Psychosis !

[jacob erin-cilberto]

that of many of us, perhaps...

thank you, Connie.

j.

[B]

Sometimes those parties are a form of outburst
we walk by and think we do not care

to foolishly misinterpret the true position of those partying

maybe they are sadder than we once gave them credit for

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Nisreen...
j.

[Ruth]

Deep breath...this runs a loop in my mind Jacob...wow...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Poppy.

j.

[David Scott]

I sleep just fine except when I get a toothache. :)
I wish...
Still, it is an easy thing to clear the conscience, but few ever do. I wonder why? Maybe we just keep adding guilt faster than we can clear the debris?
I like the line, "cracks in the cups of morning". This could be taken several ways.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

that might be true about faster than we can clear the debris..

thank you, my friend...

j.

[MomzillaNC]

You’ve encapsulated the way little tragedies, betrayals, and foibles may drag at us until we just want to shut out the whole world.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Momzilla...
j.

[MomzillaNC]

YVW Merry Christmas

[alifeacoustic]

Love the line party next door to our regrets. Those tender time bombs do lack the subtlety of a quiet and unobtrusive appearance, but they certainly have a way of waking us into alertness.
Glad to see this one made it over the finishing line Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, alife.

j.

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

Cracks in the cups of morning.....timeless apparitions!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Queenie...

j.

[Einstein Noodle]

poetry and world events tucked in morning coffee and staying in bed ...i am a morning person but inspiration doesn't assault me then ..it seems in the mid afternoons tings overtake me ..deep driving commentary jacob ..the weavings for me are quite brilliant ...
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, E.

j.

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks for sharing sir!