ampersands and an ocean of meaning in a happy tear

ampersands and an ocean of meaning in a happy tear

 

 

 

a valid point

unannounced,

just the eye's watery voice

at a glance, circumcised ---

 

no distinction or extinction

the total picture

understood,

without a word

 

you,

love,

me,

poet

 

silent poem

just a period

on an otherwise blank page

 

see what i mean?

just feel it,

 

&

 

you will.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

12/28/15

Reviews

[Alfred Kukitz]

Eye's watery voice, great line to a great poem. Masterful!

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Al.

j.

[SleeplessVolcano]

Beautifully written......I have a poem semi-finished called "ampersand".....now I feel inspired to rework it....:)

I dare you to tackle the elusive ellipsis.......those mystical dots often able to speak a thousand words.....

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, those mystical ellipses...
thank you, Sleepless...

[Einstein Noodle]

such a peaceful feeling that goes with the tear ... one of the longest titles in my yearly memory .. ..especially something special about "amber sands" ... and as to the "point" ... its pretty minimal ... but meditating upon it ...one can easily be absorbed into that ocean .. what a great poem jacob ... how fine it runs the mind
E.
ps. but where does one strategically place said period? ... i would have to put mine in the middle :} not very avant-garde of me is it?! :))

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like your question---yes, where to put those periods...thank you for your words, E.

j.

[Einstein Noodle]

......................................................................................bruahahahaha! >:

[iand63]

Another 'quiet' piece masterfully constructed Jacob

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, iand63,

j.

[Coyote Poetry]

Beautiful words and thoughts my friend. I hope you have a safe and fun New Years my friend.
Coyote

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Coyote, and same to you, a great New Year.

j.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome and I hope you are enjoying the holidays.

[...]

I love it, and I'm keeping it :)
Will you read this to your students?
I think it's gorgeous, Jacob

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, lynn....i read other poets with my students, don't bring any of mine into class...but what is pretty nice is that two of my colleagues use some of my poems for their classes...and it is very interesting and kind of weird to read papers written by the students that are about my stuff...i feel funny reading the papers...like they should be only on the poems in our textbook...the famous, lasting ones....like Dickinson, Plath, Whitman and such.

[Jimmy Yetts]

Some people speak in ampersands: and...and...and...and...
Don't ampersands remind you of something musical?
Thoroughly enjoyed your unique & clever ode to maximum minimalism!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Jimmy, appreciate your words.

j.

[redzone]

& just where would we be without those &s.. & those "happy tear(s)".. & yes, it can be felt & seen & no blanks here Jacob...

redzone

[jacob erin-cilberto]

maybe the ampersand could have been used for the word "like"---i try to get my students to avoid using so many of them in their speech...& sometimes it works & sometimes it doesn't. :)))

[redzone]

yea, where did all the "like" and "whatever" come from??? can drive a person to drink "like" Bukowski & sing the "whatever" blues... ah Jacob, good luck in your efforts... kids!!??

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and what's worse, these are college students---bad habits die hard. They often have such intelligent, insightful responses in class, but cluttered with all of the "likes"--

[V]

I also think that less is often more, especially when it comes to writing poetry. I like simple, rather short pieces, even one word can so often tell more than several pages. I like the term "silent poem".

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, mimi...

j.

[V]

Welcome :)

[Elwyn]

Encapsulating. I like the idea of a single period on a blank page, says so much without any noise at all.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Elwyn.

j.