sale's slip

sale's slip

 

 

 

i was in this quaint little shop of love

looking for a heart to purchase,

at a sensible emotional price,

 

but wasn't willing to expend the feelings

at such high risk,

 

so i left before sunrise,

and headed to Wal-Mart

for my next low budget affair.

 

 

erin-cilberto

1/6/16

Reviews

[gabrielle]

We are often advised to take calculated risks in business but this piece makes me realize that the same principle may likewise be applied in terms of investing in a relationship. There are those who wants to risk it all then end up at nothing. So maybe, there are times that we need to play safe...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful words,

j.

[Jennesis]

Those feelings can be freaking expensive! The sheer volume of your work is amazing Jacob. You have such masterpieces every day, like you breathe out beautiful poetry with your every exhale. Cool imagery here, we all think about it when we are going to 'spend', whether it be cash money or currency of the heart. Budget affairs from WalMart are a bargain for the moment, but how many times do they need replacing?
Love the food for thought here~
Jennesis

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind words, Jenn.
i feel more like a conduit for poetry than an actual poet.

j.

[Jennesis]

Well, you are definitely conducting, and I think all of us here would argue, you are the poet, even if it is just coming through you, it is part of you too. Always love reading your words~

[Lydia Shutter]

LOVE this one. Relationships do come with a hefty price tag.....one that can only be paid with honest emotions and trust. Sometimes we are not ready for that sort of relationship and settle for the discount variety. Great metaphor. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Lydi...

j.

[Beccy]

Goods from quaint little shops often come at too high a price and it's always very much harder to cast out something that was once top quality.

Beccy.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Beccy.

j.

[CD Campbell]

At least Wal-mart doesn't lie to you and tell you you're getting something high quality. I think you made the right choice. CD

[jacob erin-cilberto]

that's true....thank you, CD...

j.

[Einstein Noodle]

beautiful! its a fearful thing to fall into the hands of God ..and even more fearful to take that leap of trust at such great risk ... i fell in love too much once upon a time ..not only recklessly leaping; but strapped on and lit that rocket that fired with great intensity straight into the rocks far below ...pathetic and disastrous ..but ohhhhh what a ride down ;)
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, What a ride down!
thank you for your words, E.

j.

[Einstein Noodle]

yep! :} ...down to destruction! and now a testament to survivability of the elderly ;) yahahahaha!

[Jimmy Yetts]

Ha! Wall-Mart will do if you're looking for an affair that would be cheap, even in China.
Very apt, very entertaining metaphors, Jacob.
A clever bit of verse!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Jimmy.

j.

[Kaitlyn Black]

This a perfect way to describe the walls that we put up in order to keep our hearts guarded from the possible heartbreak associated with committed relationships. Very good work.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Kaitlyn.

j.

[jesserose99]

oh, I so relate, i have been at Wal-Mart, and thinking what am i doing here, because while you are at one store, or at least myself, while at one store, i find myself wondering why i am not at the other store because it would be so much better. Relationships I swear...always end up with either a heart tear, or a busted relationship battery.

Now, the one constant in the equation is always me, and of that i am aware, 'tis true. Yet, i do try and self-analyze. Your poetry has me doing so in depth right now. As per usual.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review and sharing how you relate to this...

j.