under water blues

under water blues

 

 

 

after the storm of grief

 

left in your wake,

F.E.M.A took one look at my flooded cheeks

and declared my heart worthy

 

of disaster relief.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

2/3/16

Reviews

[Dalton]

This affect of this poem is experientially familiar to me: grieving despair. Brevity done to brilliance.
Sincerely,
D

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Dalton.
j.

[Pansy]

Wow. This is so brief and so intense.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Pansy...

appreciate your words.

j.

[Norman 223]

As we don't seem to have the equivalent of FEMA over here I rely on my own judgement of life management. If I'm coping and succeeding in the experience ,I'm OK. But perhaps that's what you implied in your poem. Norman

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like that, Norman----always appreciate the angles you take when coming towards my poems...

j.

[iand63]

To feel is to be. The shingles may rattle and frighten us, but often when we check, our frame is strong and sound. A rye piece J I enjoyed this immensely.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, ian.

j.

[redzone]

uhho Jacob, you must be in BIG trouble if F.E.M.A has made this declaration concerning your heart... they hardly ever get it right, underestimating the damage done and the need to fix... thank goodness our hearts do have the capacity for self-healing, otherwise we would all be screwed.. and we also have those jagged little pills of poetry to help us along..

your poems are always a warm blanket and hot coffee after being soaked by floods and storms, Jacob

redzone

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, they do get it wrong quite a lot, don't they?

thank you for the kind words, Curt.

j.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Everyone deserves to move on...
A little gem today. Thanks for sharing this, sir J.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Dhaye.

j.

[David Scott]

Don't we know... Not to mention the horrors of being stuck in the super dome unrequited dreams.

A fun poem Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you , yes...stuck in the super dome...after dealing with Katrina and the Waves---

read morethank you , yes...stuck in the super dome...after dealing with Katrina and the Waves---

FEMA didn't react fast enough then, and doesn't when one is dealing with the disaster of a bad relationship.

j.

[softlyfall]

Suddenly I am thinking of the photo of Emmett Kelly, the circus clown...in the wake of the fire that destroyed it all, a single eternal unimaginably sad tear running down his face, over the clown makeup. That is disaster, when happiness is turned into grief, by anybody's measure.
I love to read your poems. They are so very different from my own but that only serves to challenge my mind...and THAT is something I love more than life.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and likewise, i not only enjoy your style, but your reviews, and the different insights that you bring...and that was such a sad photo...

thank you, Amy...

j.

[Corset]

Not only is this witty with a sly sense of humor but it also touches our heart. :) Disaster relief is something you have been for so many Jacob :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

aw, that is really kind of you to say, Corset...i am encouraged to keep doing this writing thing.read moreaw, that is really kind of you to say, Corset...i am encouraged to keep doing this writing thing.

j.

[Corset]

well I should hope so!

[WittyWonka]

Tsunamis are most devastating. Great metaphor!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

especially when they flood the heart...thank you for your words,

j.

[WittyWonka]

That's true. You are welcome.