Lock Box

Lock Box

 

 

 

you approached my heart

like it was walking on the boulevard

among street hustlers

 

there is always a price, for

a night of loving,

a month,

a year of hopeful engaging,

wispy dreams of forever wearing out their shoes

 

all the enticing smiles provoking the emotional wallet

to magically appear,

 

"how much?" he secrets to her,

"let's talk price, later" she confides

 

he takes her hand,

and they walk to the moon,

spend a short eternity in the back seat of a rising star

 

then suddenly, he wakes up in a dark sky

with an empty billfold,

and indifference locked away in an impenetrable vault

of wizened, cynical years.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

2/6/16

Reviews

[Dalton]

"there is always a price, for
a night of loving,
a month,
a year of hopeful engaging,
wispy dreams of forever wearing out their shoes". The latter seems to echo the ascetic assertions of Buddha - pleasure results in pain. It's a thought I've pondered myself.
Lovely work as always.
D

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Dalton.
j.

[.]

Another very good write, Jacob.

A wonderful piece about love and life through the years and the emotional currency involved to maintain that love.

Well written.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Doodley.


j.

[Brittany Bostic]

A beautiful perception of love between people and how honesty comes to play after years of being together. Going through turmoil and great times during life with another person…

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Brittany,

j.

[Lyn Anderson]

very clever, and starkly real, your imagery here. a very good read.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, KL...
j.

[Scrap]

Wow! Ups and downs emotionally in this write.

It Leaves me questioning.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your visit and kind words, Scrap.

j.

[CA Anurag Sharma]

Another gem Jacob Sir. I simply admire your style of writing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for the kind words, Anurag--

j.

[JayceeC]

Jacob, I like this piece it had some great off beat imagery. My favorite is the first stanza, perhaps because I find it so relatable. I'd make one small change and open with she instead of you. The change in focus was a bit of for me...But maybe you wanted the distancing?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, the distance, but i appreciate the suggestion...thank you for your review, my friend.
read moreyes, the distance, but i appreciate the suggestion...thank you for your review, my friend.

j.

[Einstein Noodle]

"he takes her hand,
and they walk to the moon,"

i love those lines!! reminds me of this fine old song
https://youtu.be/LiAtgVi4c_0

profound tragedy the "impenetrable vault
of wizened, cynical years." man! makes me wish i could help somehow ... so ..i am moved .. another good one says i!
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, E.

always appreciate your visits...

j.

[softlyfall]

I beg to differ...
love is not meant to give you anything other than the joy of giving it away without expectation or demand. Any love less than unconditional and existing without need or desire for reward, any love that looks beyond the single moment of actual existence...not even love at all.

HUMPPFFF

[jacob erin-cilberto]

definitely better if given without expectation...no argument there.

thank you for your response, Amy...the reward at times is much worth the risk.

j.

[softlyfall]

Jacob Jacob Jacob...you had to go and qualify that with "sometimes"...which leaves it as good as negated. Set your anahata free, my friend.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

not necessarily negated...but feelings can't be labeled as right or wrong, because what we feel is simply what we feel...

[softlyfall]

My whole point is that, right or wrong, ALWAYS worth it.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

gotcha!.....

[Lydia Shutter]

"The emotional wallet"...loved the concept of that. If only we could fill the wallet by going to the bank and making a withdrawal! You took me back to the days of the "submarine races" and "love by the dashboard lights" with this one. Alas, the world will never be as full of promise as it was back then, will it? We are wizened and cynical, but you know what? That is not such a bad thing. Always a pleasure to read you. Happy Valentine's Day, my friend. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Lydi...and Happy Valentines back at ya...

j.