strange artistry

strange artistry

 

 

 

strange contraptions

your scissor lips

slice the throat of my meanings

 

conceptual longing

to kiss the themes from your sharply

bladed words

 

silence is blood soaked and serrated

awkward cut,

i'm bleeding you out

 

a pale impression

left

of a papier mache  heart.

 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

4/30/16

Reviews

[Matching Socks]

Scissor lips, I like that. Some people just enjoy cutting remarks. Every cut bleeds something for them to feast on. The papier mache heart is quite the image though, layer over layer over layer creating a cocoon.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review and insights, Ana.

j.

[Lorraine Montez]

Great illustration of how, when wielding a wordless defense, compassion is never passive. Strange artistry, artfully done!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Rain...

j.

[barleygirl]

In my younger days, occasionally accused of having a sandpaper tongue & a poison pen, I know a little bit about this word distortion of which you write! I not only dealt abrasiveness (thinking myself so clever), but I also interpreted sharp meanings into otherwise innocent & peaceful words from others. You've taken such mean-heartedness & stated it in vivid terms, using original analogies. Oh, how I can relate!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for sharing your relationship to this piece, barleygirl...always appreciate your insightful visits.

j.

[Nisreen]

We often undermine the power of a word
How it can destroy mean instead of add to it ?

As a poet
We often know the most
the value of meaning

Loved reading this one

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insights and kind words,
j.

[redzone]

indeed, snarky sarcastic words cut deep and often, even when we try to explain or make up for any misunderstanding, they cut even deeper... especially if those "scissor lips" belong to the one we have loved and perhaps still love...

I think too, that heart is not "papier mache" since I can see blood oozing from this poem..

such wonderful metaphors you create in this love lost poem Jacob...

redzone

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Curt---

j.

[paddy d daly]

Cutting and heart opening, so much said with
so few words.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, paddy.

j.

[Shabeeh Haider]

Words can really hurt. They can slice your heart. A painful write. Love your use of phrases. "slice the throat of my meanings", "silence is blood soaked and serrated"
Masterfully crafted.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind reveiew, Shabeeh.

j.

[V]

I like the combination of softness, sensuality and painful, dark(er) expressions. Paper cuts really hurt - in one way or another. I particularly adore the lines "silence is blood-soaked and serrated" and "i'm bleeding you out". They read so well and relatable to me. I have the impression we have similar concepts in writing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for relating to my words, Vanessa...i kind of think the same thing also.

j.

[V]

You're welcome. Writer types often have similar concepts in thinking and writing.

[Vatsal Rohilla (account..]

Lovely ending- pale impressions left of a papier mache heart. Sometimes it is one hell of a job to make out what a person means by his finely crafted words. When the talk is over and we ponder over the whole thing then we discover a whole stock of things which we should have said, but the right things always come to our mind at the wrong time. Well-written. Keep writing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, and insights...Vatsal...

j.

[andrew mitchell]

How sarcastic comments can cut a heart down to size. Who says words don't hurt. A power write with your usual expected finesse j.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, andrew.

j.