no reprisal from the ashes

no reprisal from the ashes

 

 

i wrote a first draft of a poem

but then shut the window

 

shivered one more time

then threw the pen

into the fire,

 

walked outside the cabin

trudged several feet through snow white pages

turned an eerie inkish blue,

watched my writing churn smoke from the chimney

 

then flew away

with the words under wing

looking forward to a different thing.

 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

7/21/16

Reviews

[Valentine]

Laughing...funny how ideas come to mind...and then just float away. Neat idea for a write. Kathie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Kathie.

j.

[Jon Roggie]

The words are still there, and they are waiting to be tried again, if only with a new perspective.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like that...yes, thanks Jon....there is hope.

[Jon Roggie]

There is always hope. We just have to try to grasp it.

[andrew mitchell]

Just a long pause before one gathers one's thoughts or where your thoughts may take you. Lovely work as always Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, andrew.'

j.

[RomaJ]

You are a genius Wordsmith.
II am so impressed by the word play,
Crafted so beautifully.
It draws an image of a journey through words and imaginations;
Sometimes taking the scenic routes are more fun..
Inspiring an evolution of new ideas to soar.

Loved this.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are very kind, Roma...
thank you,

j.

[Pryde Foltz]

The images created are rathe vivid and powerful, Jacob. Now that is good poetry:):):)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Pryde.

j.

[Diana]

I like this one. I'm reminded of winter-time and weather so cold you can see your breath. It's almost got a Washington Irving sort of feel to it, too. A refreshingly cool piece!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like how you saw this, Diana...
thank you for the visit...

j.

[Ana Papaya]

I love the ending. Like KL, I hope you don't really fly away.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Ana...i appreciate that...

j.

[Lyn Anderson]

I hope you don't do that, because then we wouldn't have all this stuff to ponder upon.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, KL...you are sweet to say that.

j.

[Lyn Anderson]

More like selfish. I feel a hole when I can't read someone I enjoy reading.

[Baby Ricochet]

I did that and wandered off for a year. No snow though. Good job Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

glad you didn't get caught in a blizzard...

thanks, Mark..

j.

[sL]

I'm allowed to do that??? Just stop writing our thing and walk away? Lol. I love this poem. Sometimes we just have to leave well enough alone, though often I forget that I can.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Stephanie...

j.