soaring under

soaring under

A Poem by jacob erin-cilberto


soaring under


eventually
you will waterfall into my arms
dive off the cliff of doubt
with reckless abandon
and after the deep plunge together
sifting sand filled memories
and cutting through the clear 
waters of love,
surfacing to wave at the moon

we will float into eternity
holding hands with hushed voices
so as not to disturb the glassy calm
reflection of the us
that was always meant to be.



erin-cilberto
7/28/16


© 2016 jacob erin-cilberto



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I very much enjoyed this poem. I love the lines,"you will waterfall into my arms," and "surfacing to wave at the moon." I also like how calming and reassuring the last stanza takes it to eternity. Thanks for sharing this.

Well done.

Posted 1 Year Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Year Ago

thank you for your kind words, H.L.

j.
I just love this poem.How you portrayed the depth of love that is meant to last to the eternity in simple words. And the title compliments the writing. Amazing.

Posted 1 Year Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Year Ago

thank you for your kind review, Queen.

j.
Loving while knowing that one day it will all end. I got a strange sense of knowing and accepting from this poem. I like it's story and the love in each of the lines. I can see the people walking on the beach as easily as i can see them sailing off together, at the end of the line. Another beautiful piece, as always.

Posted 1 Year Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Year Ago

thank you for your very kind review, Brittany.
j.
Beautiful images and light-filled phrases that capture the faith in that love that can last an eternity. I love the invitation to dive off the cliff of doubt- and that feeling that you are waiting for something you can see already happening. A stunning use of the waterfall and other natural images to capture the surrender to love. Wonderfully romantic and vivid.

Posted 1 Year Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Year Ago

thank you for your very kind words, Marianne..

j.
I love the wording in this poem! It really adds to the romantic vibe.
"waterfall into my arms"
"We will float into eternity"
"reflection of us that was always meant to be"

I thought it was a really sweet poem that had beautiful flow!

Posted 1 Year Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Year Ago

thank you for your kind review, Quinn.
j.
What a stunningly romantic write this is, Jacob! A little different from your pen. Divine imagery...floating into eternity with the one you love...and lust. The urgency of longing is palpable! Kismet! I enjoyed this one. Lydi**

Posted 1 Year Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Year Ago

yes, it is palpable, isn't it?

thank you for your kind review and insights, Lydi...read more
I've thought the same thing many times & you've penned it so well . . . with such delicious longing, creativity, & powerful natural descriptions. You could sell fire to a person in hell with this one, so persuasive are your literary charms *smile*

Posted 1 Year Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Year Ago

thank you, my friend, for your kind review.

j.
Beautiful Jacob. A romantic poetry from you and what a beauty.
Starting from "water-falling in to my arms" and the "plunge together" and ending with "floating into eternity".
Indeed, this is how love was always meant to be.

Posted 1 Year Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Year Ago

thank you for your kind words, Shabeeh..

j.
Now THAT'S romance. Good one

Posted 1 Year Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Year Ago

thank you, Mark.

j.
I think this poem reads like a mix of a lot of the images you frequently (like to) use in your poems; water, moon and voices. I love the combination and its soft and refreshing appearance.

Posted 1 Year Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Year Ago

thank you for your kind review, Vanessa...

j.
Closed

1 Year Ago

You're welcome. I enjoyed reading.

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jacob erin-cilberto
jacob erin-cilberto

Carbondale, IL



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Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at two community colleges and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. Friending works two ways. If we have had .. more..

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