soaring under

soaring under


eventually
you will waterfall into my arms
dive off the cliff of doubt
with reckless abandon
and after the deep plunge together
sifting sand filled memories
and cutting through the clear 
waters of love,
surfacing to wave at the moon

we will float into eternity
holding hands with hushed voices
so as not to disturb the glassy calm
reflection of the us
that was always meant to be.



erin-cilberto
7/28/16

Reviews

[Alfred Kukitz]

I only wish the moon was me watching this all, the beauty of poetry.

That line.......you will waterfall into my arms is a real gem.

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Al.

j.

[Corset]

That's just lovely Jacob, when you do a romance write, you do it up right ;)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Corset.

j.

[Shannon]

The title drew me in. Turning a cliché over. Instead of over, diving in.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thanks, S.

j.

[Mehameha]

The hush of holding dear a moment in time, thought, or even a dream itself. You caught it beautifully. I will keep reading. Good stuff.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Mehameha---

j.

[Nisreen]

Looking at someone and wondering
when will the moment come along when this person jumps into my arms
and i become this safety net

your words are filled with love
and most importantly the need for security

Pretty sweet

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are very kind with your review, thank you.

j.

[Ana Papaya]

soaring under!!! yes, i love what this saying.
dive in - this is where our passion will collide, very enjoyably

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Ana.

j.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Pretty and sweet...very romantic. I love all the reference to water...water, love, life...always a connection there...we are born in a rush of water...as for me, I've always been a river rat and a beach bum...every chance I could get...LOVE the ocean...love the mountain streams...and can't think of a better place to share a romantic interlude. Very nicely penned.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Fabian.

j.

[Einstein Noodle]

i like the word play in the title ..it is so resilient and in your face to all things attempting to drag down ..sneaky use of cliches ... i think work well ..i can feel the grit of sand and pulsating waters ..turned glassy smooth .. a very beautiful love poem ...i feel romantic on reading it ...now where did Norma go off to?? ;)
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, E.

j.

[Miss Sharon]

Oh my goodness! This is one of the most beautiful poems I've read in a long time. You've outdone yourself this time Jacob. Pen on my friend! ~Sharon

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Sharon...

j.