4 lines from a thaw

4 lines from a thaw

A Poem by jacob erin-cilberto

4 lines from a thaw

 

 

 

snowed in by your icy demeanor

slipping on your indifferent pavement

 

even my salty tears

can not steady my heart's step.

 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

1/5/17


© 2017 jacob erin-cilberto



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I love the wordplay between winter & the onslaught of a fierce romantic chill. Slippery pavement, always feeling off balance, & sprinkling salt doesn't help. So many excellent & harmonious analogies packed into such a short poem!

Posted 10 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

10 Months Ago

thank you for your kind review, barleygirl.

j.
How quickly the silent treatment can put us outside looking in without knowing how we got there. Good write, j.

Posted 10 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

10 Months Ago

thank you, Ted.

j.
Great use of words again. Thank you for knocking me out my sleeping beauty phase. I think I really missed your awesome crafting of words too.
Your words are so relatable, it's kind of incredible how they speak to me..def a favorite.

Posted 10 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

10 Months Ago

thank you for your kind review,

j.
Does nothing not inspire you? We didn't get a flake here so.

Hope for a quick thaw and the salty tears might keep the pavement from freezing next time.



Posted 10 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

10 Months Ago

thank you, James...appreciate your visits and kind words.
j.
Simple truths....simply amazing! Happy Wed. Jacob! May the remainder of your week be filled with warmth and harmony.

Posted 10 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

10 Months Ago

thank you, Queenie...appreciate your words and wishes..

j.

It is very true Sir, cold demeanor can freeze a heart instantly.
Those four lines have the power to melt many. They speak volumes. I wish the rocky cold heart also melts.
Thank you for sharing this..


Posted 10 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

10 Months Ago

thank you for your very kind words, Bala.
j.
Four lines that tell it all and I hope the thaw did indeed follow for sometimes saying and accepting it is half the battle and makes way for warmth and light to enter again.

Posted 10 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

10 Months Ago

thank you for your words, Ana.
j.
I like these four lines -- and relate -- indifference, coldness, rather than hot anger, can sting far greater than anything.

Posted 10 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

10 Months Ago

indifference is the worst...yes, hurts worse than anger...thank you, KL...
j.
No need to elaborate You said it all in 4 well compacted lines. I specially like the first two lines

Posted 10 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

10 Months Ago

thank you for your kind words, Lina...

j.
Sofia

10 Months Ago

Wow!! That's incredible..Well I'm new here..so can anyone help me with my writing
I saw that metaphor slip and fall on the ice of her demeanor Jacob and there you sat on your butt getting wet and colder by the second... and salty tears give no aide to the heart, but sometimes do give rise to wonderful poetry, like this one Jacob... do we need to call the ambulance, help you up??!!

redzone

Posted 10 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

10 Months Ago

ha ha, on the ambulance...you're too funny...thanks for the smile, my friend.

j.

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jacob erin-cilberto

Carbondale, IL



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Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at two community colleges and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. Friending works two ways. If we have had .. more..

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