4 lines from a thaw

4 lines from a thaw

A Poem by jacob erin-cilberto

4 lines from a thaw

 

 

 

snowed in by your icy demeanor

slipping on your indifferent pavement

 

even my salty tears

can not steady my heart's step.

 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

1/5/17


© 2017 jacob erin-cilberto



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Someone has buried their feelings so deeply in ice that they are beyond redemption - certainly the saline solution of our speaker's tears (for them?) are having little effect.
This speak's of such energy that could be used to help being wasted in frustration.


Posted 1 Year Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Year Ago

love your insights, Tony..

thank you,
j.
Wow. Love the use of the weather terms and the write is one that speaks to me on a personal level (jealous a bit of this one). Kudos. ~Jim

Posted 1 Year Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Year Ago

thank you for your kind words, Jim.

j.
Jacob, love this one. Started to laugh as I read your words. Good one. Valentine

Posted 1 Year Ago


Thawing my brain from this winter freeze... Why does the lack of sunlight steal our loves? And we still have to make it through a few more months...

Posted 1 Year Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Year Ago

yes we do...thank you for your words, Bacchus,

j.
Love this!
So simple, and yet it speaks VOLUMES!
Awww, winter...you saucy wench you!

Posted 1 Year Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Year Ago

ha ha...thank you, ReedWrite...

j.
Admire the poet's optimistic perspective; he might be forty lines from a thaw.
Clearly, this guy is not soon coming in out of the cold.
Excellent use of metaphors.


Posted 1 Year Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Year Ago

thank you, Jimmy...

j.

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jacob erin-cilberto

Carbondale, IL



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Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at two community colleges and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. Friending works two ways. If we have had .. more..

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