it's that day again

it's that day again


ascertain a heart beat
ever so slight,
a murmur
whisper
nothing said,
no need, 
the stethoscope finds that inkling of love

it is born from a womb of ambivalence
of apathetic thoughts conjoining with one another
chemistry of nonchalant approach
indifference takes off its clothes

the bare naked truth is an infant's
pulse
a tiny breath of love

yes, there is a heart beat
love has life
and life has love,

don't tell anyone,
promise?



erin-cilberto
2/14/17

Reviews

[redzone]

sssshhhhhh.... I hear a heart beating... a Jacob heart, but whisper please so as not to scare away that spark of love embedded ever so slightly... a beat a beat a beat palpations that just may turn into arrhythmia... one can hope, right ??!! as long as it isn't fatal...

I think though Jacob since you wrote this, it is no longer a secret, eh.. lol

stealing from Isabella below, it is "intriguing" and I love it even if I must keep quiet... ;0)

redzone
ps, did that silly cupid catch you again Jacob... want me to mess him up some for you???

[jacob erin-cilberto]

appreciate your words and humor very much...or as juliet would say "marvelous much"---:)
thank you, Curt.
j.

[Isabella Ivy]

This piece is most intriguing to me. I read it three times and can't put my finger on exactly why. Is intrigue ok when you might have been after a more specific reaction? I.I.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i am pleased with any reaction to my pieces...and intrigued works for me very well, thank you.

i am glad if a reader stops and thinks when reading...it gives me hope that my writing is touching some kind of nerve.
j.

[Isabella Ivy]

Oh good! Nice to meet you :) I.I.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

nice to meet you as well, Isabella.

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

this is subtly uplifting, and your implicit execution of such positivity is very unique: instead of urging for happiness, you are urging to ignore passivity

every living thing in this world deserves to be enjoyed and not be taken for granted; lovely work!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful words, Sprint.

j.

[Lydia Shutter]

People who should never have a baby often do have one....and the child becomes a casualty. Yes, a child SHOULD be a tiny breath of love, but all too often people do not treat it as such. Powerful write. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes a casualty...mmm, where is the love....thank you, lydi.
j.

[Lydia Shutter]

Roberta Flack and Donny Hathaway sang that! :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

good job...yes, they sure did sing that song...:)))

[Lydia Shutter]

Can't remember a lot of things, but music, well, it is always with me.

[Paul Bell]

I like the actually birth. That part where you count the digits, and the world is fine. Doesn't matter if the baby's the wrong colour. As long as you've checked for twenty digits, and they're there. All is good.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, all is good...love is universal...or should be.
thank you, Paul.
j.

[Jimmy Yetts]

Babies are not always convenient; pesky little angels who require far too much attention.
Many of us strongly feel these truly unwanted human cherubs must then be barbarously snuffed out--for their and everyone's own good.
After all, what other more humane solutions could possibly be found?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insights, Jimmy---

i am finding the responses to this one quite interesting...j.

[NAHTEWOHARD]

This is really good. I really enjoyed it., and I look forward to your new writings!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words,
j.

[andrew mitchell]

A day of love yes, but a now a new day of uncertainty exists. Nice write J

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, so true...thank you, andrew.

j.

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Jacob... a promise is a baby's sigh
when soft clouds float in a pink and blue sky. Where have all the flowers gone ... long time growing. Rain and sunshine blessed with love. truly, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your sweet words, Pat.
j.

[Patricia Wedel]

Your poem is amazing... really...
out of the blue... Angels appear...