under your canopy

under your canopy

 

 

slight rain taps shoulder

shivered spine of reflection

almost a sun's dance

 

 

erin-cilberto

3/21/17

Reviews

[William Gardner]

There is something to be learned from a rainstorm. When meeting with a sudden shower, you try not to get wet and run quickly along the road. But doing such things as passing under the eaves of houses, you still get wet. When you are resolved from the beginning, you will not be perplexed, though you still get the same soaking. This understanding extends to everything. -hagakure

[jacob erin-cilberto]

love your insightful comments, William...

thank you

j.

[Lydia Shutter]

I pictured someone sitting under a tree in a dense forest...just communing with nature and thoughts. The sun peeks through. The rain interrupts the reverie. You painted quite a scene here. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, i like your take...

j.

[B]

The natural forces nature
often make this wonderful mix
with the heart :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Solo...

j.

[Ken Simm.]

Whatever form this may be it is a stunning choice and use of words. There is a world here in a few lines.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Ken.
j.

[Jimmy Yetts]

Not sure whether this is haiku or senryu; most likely, senryu.
Elegant imagery suggesting many things.
Lovely piece!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you Jimmy...

j.

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

I like how the usually passive tree is represented as a person, that is capable of feeling and moving. lovely haiku

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Cascara...
j.

[andrew mitchell]

I saw`a sun shower on this one, but the meaning.... you stumped me on this one J.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, andrew....appreciate the read.
j.