the first is written in the trees

the first is written in the trees

 

 

 

chapter draws closure

Eastern pines relegated---

characters of past

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

3/21/17

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I loved this poem. Perfect logic and thoughts shared. Thank you Jacob for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Coyote....for your kind words.

j.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Jacob.

[Einstein Noodle]

clever ... its about nature but also "characters" (human) .. so do you call it a senku? :)))) i had to search a little about the Eastern Pine to satisfy my intrigue of it being relegated ..a pre-Colonial tree of the North East ..also called the "Tree of Peace" .. so your poem is deeper than i would have thought ..as certainly we are witness to the slipping away of our Colonial and especially post-Colonial ways ...and the peace ...in all our turmoil how thirsty this old tree is for peace ..really enjoyed your "senku" ...we mostly have Short Leaf Pines in Arkansas .. they grow very straight and tall with foliage only at the tops of them .. your title is a little foreboding ... i live next to a large National forest so it is well "managed to keep it healthy and growing ...but lots have been lost over our short 300 years eh!?
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, it is kind of a mix of both haiku and senryu...i like that "senku"---
i love what i learned from your response...thank you for that, E.
j.

[Einstein Noodle]

;)...................

[Bala Gorthi]

Very true, Sir. This one is universally applicable. Thank you for sharing this haiku.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Bala...

j.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A senryu capturing times relentless passage. One to stimulate thought Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, John...
j.

[Sheila Kline]

Times of old are those that were once a beginning, and as life continues and events unfold, the first chapter becomes another and another as life continues.
Those things of the beginning are no longer as important as they once were, and new events become those that "rule" so to say. The infant becomes a child, the child an adult, the adult an aged soul until death claims that which was once the beginning. So, as the eastern pine is no longer as important in our culture, another tired, weary, aged soul finds rest, now but a character of the past.
Interesting; many ways to interpret your words.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

your response is great, Sheila...such insight ....i learn more about my own words and meanings with responses like yours and Einstein's---

thank you

j.

[Tiana]

to walk beneath the whispering trees as it reveals secrets of the past ... Enjoyed immensely, J.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Tiana..
j.

[Ana Papaya]

Masterful brevity Jacob.
This is how the circle goes in life, old pines are cleared to make room for young saplings. I could read so much into this and relate it to so many things. That's the beauty of brevity. It plants the seed to let one's thoughts grow. Good work.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind review, Ana.
j.

[Ana Papaya]

My pleasure Jacob, deserved...

[William Gardner]

past or future? Good to hear from you!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, William...

j.

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Your beautiful and highly evocative haiku style write, could quite easily be a subtitle for the ‘Eastern Pines Convalescent Centre’ Near Atlantic City, NJ. Love this kind of composition be it Haiku, Senryu or Tanka!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Phill..
j.

[Lydia Shutter]

Powerfully emotional. The trees last through the years. They have seen those who are now gone...those who live on in memories. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Lydi..

j.