Passe

Passe

needles,

pinprick tears sting a heart

thimble learning from the dissonance

the sound sews itself onto an ear

but deaf seams don't cry anymore

they just unravel in their own time

and i need you more,

my bare knees scraping the ground

as i come begging

to feel you patch the open skin

of destiny,

that is moribund

with us out of fashion.

erin-cilberto

3/25/17

Reviews

[B]

I see a touch of fashion here and fabric
I know its such a random thing to say
but is longing for a partner the new fashion of love
back then lovers were inseparable
nowadays it just lingers and longing takes lead with out busy lives

Cool write

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, those busy lives...fashionable? not sure but necessary maybe...thank you for your insights, Solo.
j.

[Linda alexander]

heart is still supple so it will hurt more but the ear is deaf so supple heart kept on hurting and finally all ended after every aches and pains, the analogy of sewing matched perfect for the situation, hope none should go through those journey even if it happens more frequently than we think

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Linda...
j.

[Miss Sharon]

Bravissimo my friend. You weave the metaphors with golden thread. ~Sharon

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Sharon.
j.

[Corset]

sewing must be the daily thought, and a perfect analogy the unraveling seams, like the mind, its loose ends trailing...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Corset.
j.

[Corset]

you are welcome Jacob :)
C.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Jacob you make pain and loss a true art form! The

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, John...
j.

[Jimmy Yetts]

Painful to read; though, obviously, not nearly as painful as the devastating reality.
A metaphorically stunning verbal testicle smasher!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Jimmy...ouch, on the testicles...
j.