a service of sorts

a service of sorts


i put the ashes of us back together
just for an impulsive look at what we were
now, a lasting impression
of what could have been

burns into my heart
like the match we once struck
before the cold fire of regret
set in

and made us only a blue afterglow.


erin-cilberto
4/10/17

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

Heartfelt emotions in this one. That cold fire of regret burns more than a smoldering flame might. Great metaphor. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Lydi...
j.

[Ted Kniffen]

There always seems to be ashes left from the land of What If... What would life be like if we were still together?... What if I had said the right words?...What if I hadn't been so blind? Still, now and then, I visit 'the cold fire of regret' even though that match cannot be re-struck.

Good write, j. Thanks

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for sharing your feelings relating to this one, Ted.
j.

[Kelly Scheppers]

The lasting impression of what could have been is the hardest pill to swallow. So glad I have that behind me.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Kelly....i seem to have accrued several...
j.

[andrew mitchell]

superb writing, great metaphor, for me love is a time lapse photography from the strike to the ashes, finished.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, andrew.
j.

[B]

We think a relationship can supercharge
or receive a maintenance redo
But instead we live through those deep moments of regret
only then does it all become real !!!

I love it
i could be way off but thats my take

[jacob erin-cilberto]

so insightful you are....thank you, my friend.
j.