Unexpected You

Unexpected You

A Poem by jacob erin-cilberto

Unexpected You


trifle tears
she was worth an ocean
but i had only a river to give

i was cried out,
seaweed blues
all that was left to play
my guitar warped from the saturation
of the first cloud

now my sky passes them on
one after another,
without much pause

a puddle of remorse
then a blink

only you could refill the quarry
with your allure

if i may capture your smile
and hold it in my hands
like a slippery fish...



erin-cilberto
5/2/17

© 2017 jacob erin-cilberto



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"Unexpected You" is a good way to describe Jacob the poet, with your startlingly fresh expressions coming in a steady flow! Loved many of the "wet" and "warped" and "puddle" references that lead logically to the very original slippery fish ending (((HUGS)))

Posted 6 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

6 Months Ago

thank you for your very kind review, barleygirl...

j.
I was thinking rain man until you showed up with the fish. Nice job!

regards,
al

Posted 6 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

6 Months Ago

thank you, Al.
j.
' ..i was cried out, ~ seaweed blues ~ all that was left to play .. '

I'd say that un-expectation touches on excess here.. and, so finely put! Seems what frequently calls can as easily slip away, leaving a desire that's almost mesmerising. Perhaps?! You write in tongues, Jacob.. .. the teacher shows, as does the man.

Posted 6 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

6 Months Ago

thank you for your very kind review, emma.
j.
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'trifle tears
she was worth an ocean
but i had only a river to give' this already grasped my attention when i started reading. sometimes you just cant give it your all to someone who deserves a lot more.
'if i may capture your smile
and hold it in my hands
like a slippery fish...'
again you ended the poem with a strong stanza. i loved the poem. it delivers the essence its supposed to give out. amazing!!


Posted 6 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

6 Months Ago

thank you for your kind words, pia.
j.
Beautiful and sad, I love the little bit of hope at the end. You never cease to amaze me with your talent Jacob. This is lovely. :) Julie

Posted 6 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

6 Months Ago

you never cease to amaze me with your kind heart, Julie.

thank you
j.
It's lovely with a mixture of emotions...I liked it...:)

Posted 6 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

6 Months Ago

thank you, Surya...
j.
Ah illusive love. I guess we do harden after the abject pain of having love spear us with its deceit for the first time. After that we grow immunity the more it happens yet we who seek can still fall. Another I can relate to here Jacob. One of my favourite songs would go with it: 'Cry Me A River' by Julie London.

Posted 6 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

6 Months Ago

thank you for your words, John...and yes, Good Song.
j.
So wet! That poem dripped water- artful, fun and painful that's your motif no? well done.

Posted 6 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

6 Months Ago

thank you for your kind words, William.
j.
tragic and romantic...you have my emotions all over the place this afternoon! Love it! Imagery at the end made me smile! On plan time now...I'd say I am using my time wisely. ;)

Posted 6 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

6 Months Ago

thank you for your kind words, Larq...
j.
I'm gonna make this all about me today😁it's just what I needed,ty!

Posted 6 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

6 Months Ago

thank you, Queenie.
j.

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jacob erin-cilberto

Carbondale, IL



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Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at two community colleges and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. Friending works two ways. If we have had .. more..

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