what she wrote for him

what she wrote for him


she's a poet's rendering
his taste in musical feet
the iambics of soft locks drifting
out of rhyme,
but still flowing magnanimously
into his words,
her skin a palette 
for the paradox of smooth soul

the beat encountered
is a kiss of longing
and the longevity of feelings
that will never dry on the canvass

of his heart. 



erin-cilberto
5/4/17

Reviews

[Mark Mendoza]

The room that i imagine when reading this is a perfectly lit one for lovers in thr night . This write pulled out imagination and i dig that sort of thing . Tha k you

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Mark.
j.

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

You are the poet, the artist and the composer of this homage to grace and love personified. The muse is your inamorata. The poem is a tribute to her and to"the longevity of feelings that will never dry on the canvass". This is a song played beautifully on the heartstrings for all eternity. Bravo my friend!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i really appreciate your kind words,

j.

[Lydia Shutter]

The first stanza is so romantic and gentle...so sensual. The second is poignant and filled with intense longing. No, some memories are not disappearing. They are destined to be with us forever. Such a lovely write. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Lydi.
j.

[CookieMisfit1969]

Beautiful piece. the passion the lovers have for each other, love it. Nice writ :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Cookie...
j.

[CookieMisfit1969]

you're welcome :)

[Paul Bell]

I would love this to be some great female soul singer.
But i'll settle for the longing kiss, as long as soul music is playing in the background.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

nothing like soul music.....thank you, Paul.

[emmajoy]

' the beat encountered ~ is a kiss of longing '

Words not merely to love by, but to stay by - forever. Such beautiful words

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, emma.
j.

[Enchanted-Raven]

Beautifully done, enjoyed :) x

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Raven.
j.

[Laura Lynn Close]

feelings that seem to last so long, like memories is what I am reminded of, strange how it is "longevity of feelings" I like that line!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Laura.
j.

[Ken Simm.]

Honest, lovely thoughts from one artist to another. Isn't that what we all wish for?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Ken.
j.

[Alisa Js]

There are those certain ones who pass through our lives, those certain ones we can never forget.

Well done, you.

Alisa

[jacob erin-cilberto]

so true, Alisa.
thank you
j.