motions in an apathetic circle

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

WOW...this one reveals so much...or does it? "I want to be you, not me, never me" I can relate this line. We are all studies in contrasts. Never want to be simple, but never want to be complicated either. We live in a sort of purgatory of wanting something...but what the precise something is will never be obvious to any of us. Jacob, this one is my new favorite of yours. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, that purgatory of wanting something...and often not really being sure of what it is...thank you for the insights and kind words, my friend.

j.

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Yes! Amazing poem- each verse more stunning than the last. Dichotomy, contradiction, melancholy, self-analysis, love, regret, hope-all represented with stellar poetic prowess. Jacob you are the best! "Here's looking at you, kid...."

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Annette.
j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

I have seen you on that dark corner puffing about will you light one for me I seem to know what puffing is all about.

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i will light one for you, Al...
thanks

j.

[Kelly Scheppers]

I can see you like Bogart, smoking a cigarette on a dark corner of life. Yep, that's you, teach!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, love Bogart and all those old actors and films....that film noir style just floats my boat...love the old tv shows in black and white...like Perry Mason...has that feel to it---

just old fashioned i guess....or just old.

thank you, Kelly.

[Kelly Scheppers]

I'm a HUGE fan of TCM. The other night, I saw Robert Mitchum's son, Chris, talking about the movie his Dad was in with Jane Greer called "Out of the Past". I love the insights you always get from the hosts before the movie plays, and the interviews they show periodically. I wrote some poetry in that same vein of the film noirs. If I decide to post them, I'll be sure to give you a shout out! Thanks, J!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Yes, please do...i love that old stuff.

[redzone]

hmmm, bluffing eh, well in that case let me raise you 5 metaphors and a heartbreak poem... but you know Jacob I think you pulled that inside straight and have collected every one of them desires... after all you went home shirtless right??!! because I think a poet usually loses their hearts in each poem they write... and you Jacob are a poet!!!

redzone

[jacob erin-cilberto]

love your sense of humor...thanks for your words, Curt.
j.

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

mmmm, I live here every dream time and die here everyday....if only.....

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Queenie...yes, if only....
j.

[Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn..]

A very worthy expression of a most noble aspiration, an aspiration that makes a poet, a poet ...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Marv.
j.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Life does seem like a circle of certain needs and wants we set our mind to, even surround ourselves with them... I feel it is a bluff when we say we want to feel everything and yet be immune to everything...
A sigh provoking write.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Yumna..

j.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You're welcome, Jacob. A pleasure always :)

[Einstein Noodle]

i kind of got stuck on the title ...feels so lackadaisically languid ... i am such a lazy lout ;}
i thoroughly enjoyed your poem ..love the honest admitions and aspirations ..surely they mark us all ...have to say these lines:
"i want to love you till the end of time,
but be by myself more often than not" made me chuckle as well ...if only "they" understood that being alone does not mean "...don't love me" such a hardy good read for me this morning jacob!
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, E.
j.

[emmajoy]

' I want to live outside myself ~ in the safety of my own mind.. '

Oh my goodness, so many plausible 'i want to ... ' desires, leading to a sadness of time's passing, one's needs are past fulfillment.

But, perhaps. that is how and what you are, jacob, a little of this, a little of that and, in total, a human being with a great many facets, edges, faces - call it what you like. Surely, there's no sorrow in that?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind words, emma.
j.

[emmajoy]

Always hope to touch your words with close understanding or as near as ..