the totality of Eve

the totality of Eve

A Poem by jacob erin-cilberto


the totality of Eve


she hides the sun of her heart
behind dark shades
the damaged retinas beyond repair
as is her love
now eclipsed by years of abuse

shadows over her face
clouded bruises
a blue sky marred
the smile that used to shine
a foregone conclusion
a far gone ending

and when the fatal minutes pass
she will find her way home to
a permanent  firmament 
sink into the kinder canopy
than that firm fist that blistered her skin
with cumulus blows

like a sudden rainstorm
that destroyed a once perfect
day in paradise
before all the people came to watch
the event.


erin-cilberto
8/18/17

© 2017 jacob erin-cilberto



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Powerful piece, though we are just like You, observers, but You dragged us into these sorrowful painful lonely moments very effectively that actually our senses and mind were aroused, and this to be written by a man makes it even more wonderful, there is a certain sensitivity through Your words, and a true spirit of a woman hide between them, a spirit carrying more than one character of a woman, if we grasp closely, that only an aware sense can write it, great poem, thank You*

Posted 3 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

3 Months Ago

thank you for your kind words, Light....

j.
Real..Sad..Disturbing .....

A prison of pain and darkness..

Will reoccur in times......somewhere..............

J.J.

Posted 3 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

3 Months Ago

unfortunately, way too many times...
thank you, Jazzy...
j.
J. J.  Nightingale

3 Months Ago

Right..... You are welcome jacob..
Beautiful, Jacob. And thank you for penning this for all the Eves who had to go through undeserved painful struggles.

Posted 3 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

3 Months Ago

i absolutely despise the men who put women through this...and i know it works the opposite way too.... read more
Pain and hopelessness and death so perfectly expressed. So many die before they leave. Well done.

Posted 3 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

3 Months Ago

thank you for your kind words, Mary.
j.
Mary

3 Months Ago

Our brains must be in synch, Jacob. I just posted SSDD which is about the day yo day life of an abus.. read more
Very soul searching
Very dark but she sees light
Away from those fists


Posted 3 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

3 Months Ago

thank you for your words, Julie.
j.
I feel the pain and hopelessness of a woman suffering from domestic abuse articulated in your words j. Eclipse references and imagery are vivid and dramatic as love and life itself is eclipsed by violence. You give a voice to so many victims of this crime. Thank you for this amazing poem.

Posted 3 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

3 Months Ago

thank you for your very kind review, Annette.
j.
Tbough the poem is stunning in its entirety, here are the lines after my heart...

and when the fatal minutes pass
she will find her way home to
a permanent firmament
sink into the kinder canopy
than that firm fist that blistered her skin
with cumulus blows

Thank you for this ultra memorable read!

Posted 3 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

3 Months Ago

thank DIVYA, you are very kind in your reviews of this old writer.

j.
DIVYA

3 Months Ago

Its both a pleasure and an enriching experience teading you Mr. Jacob. You are welcome.
DIVYA

3 Months Ago

Thats 'reading' :)
Dark.
Good, but darker than most of your romance writes.

Posted 3 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

3 Months Ago

thank you, Bacchus.
j.
nicely written j as always with polish, although the undertones suggested an eclipse i couldn't help feeling this was a mask for domestic violence but that's just me and you are the alfred hitchcock of verse with hidden twists and plots. lol.

Posted 3 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

3 Months Ago

very astute observations, my friend.

thank you,

j.
Having watched a total eclipse in the Australian outback, the feeling of awe has to be experienced.
Life appears to stop for several minutes. Birds fall silent, shadows turn purple and lengthen and a chill envelopes. Almost a homonym for the Apocalypse .

Posted 3 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

3 Months Ago

i like your poetic reply, Norman...more comforting than my poem is...
j.

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jacob erin-cilberto

Carbondale, IL



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Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at two community colleges and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. Friending works two ways. If we have had .. more..

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