what really burns sweet

what really burns sweet

A Poem by jacob erin-cilberto

what really burns sweet

 

my elaboration

is a collaboration 

of words and phrases

heart and soul fazes

my intention

is a convention

of trivial verse

not so terse

 

as to be succinct enough

or distinct enough

 

 

sounds like a thousand other poets

in wistful configuration

and conflagration

of an indignation

 

to ignite the passion,

as i recite 

calcite responses

to those who are cold as stone

thinking love poems

are spreading fluff

 

as i eat my cotton candy dream

and the keys stick to each other

 

like the two of us.

 

 

erin-cilberto

8/26/17


© 2017 jacob erin-cilberto



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what really burns sweet is our immutability or our capacity to change even when change is what might bind us together....Like two keys sticking together when the wind is blowing and the lock is frozen.....I get it...and it's marvelous.....dana

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jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

thank you for your kind words, dana,
j.
Words in a relation that fit a certain scheme gave itself the punch it needed.

Regards,
Al

Posted 1 Month Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

thank you for your kind words, Al.
j.
Love the alliteration throughout! Nice smooth flow and poke at the art of writing poetry. Nice!

Posted 1 Month Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

thank you for your kind review, Seriana...

j.
The calcite responses are from those who have been burned by love; and having been burned, they are afraid. Love, however, wins out in the end. Always has; always will.

Beautiful phrasing throughout.

Posted 1 Month Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

thank you for your words, Linda...

j.
Thumb clicking truths, I wanna snap some fingers at this one!

Posted 1 Month Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

then go right ahead, Cory...thank you...
j.
This poem just dances on the page- great musicality, form, cadence, rhyme. Clever and playful words. But artful words and thoughts nonetheless. Fluff is in the eye of the beholder...What's wrong with a little fluff every now & then anyway??!



Posted 1 Month Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

thank you, Annette...
j.
love this Jacob, everyone has to have some fluff in their lives or what a miserable world it would be...love the ending too..candy floss dreams :)

Posted 1 Month Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

thank you, Stella..

j.
This is highly magnificent, i'm thrilled...


Posted 1 Month Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

thank you for your kind words,
j.
This would be fun to hear it recited... we all have our own voice and our own style of writing... rhyme if you like or don't (I choose the latter)

Posted 1 Month Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

yes, i hear you , Dale...and i rarely do rhyme either...unless i am naturally in the frame of mind a.. read more
This would have made John Lennon so angry at one time lol - remember McCartney wrote 'Silly Love Songs' in response to his put down of love songs and such.
Times I wish I'd never felt this 'thing called love' Jacob but then I remember how ecstatic it made me feel and I want it back...lol

Posted 1 Month Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

me too, Tony....and yes, those two really fought over McCartney's lyrics...
thank you,
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jacob erin-cilberto
jacob erin-cilberto

Carbondale, IL



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Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at two community colleges and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. Friending works two ways. If we have had .. more..

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