still life loony tunes

still life loony tunes

spastic inclinations

trampoline reactions

the kiss, expressive impact

of you dancing within me

fifty years lying in state

memory just as alive 

as then

heart still bouncing in dazed delight

the thought of our exploration

speaking in tongues

an exercise in coming of age

now my mind is in a rubber room of touch

i still feel movement on a floor of osculation

and lose my balance

thanks for the dance.

erin-cilberto

10/4/17

Reviews

[andrew mitchell]

It's amazing what a tune can do during and well after the dance. Nice one Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you my friend.
j.

[Carol Cashes]

Sensory memory! Wish I had the gray matter for that...I'm good if I remember a name, while unconsciously singing every single word to Highway to Heaven....

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ah, yes..Stairway to Heaven....they play it so much it's hard not to know it by heart...:)
thank you, Carol.
j.

[Carol Cashes]

Don't hear it as much down here so much as *shudder* Sweet Home Alabama!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i still like that song...haven't heard it so much...but any song will drive us crazy if we hear it enough...

[Carol Cashes]

Yeah, move to this side of the Mason-Dixon line and any Classic Rock station will cure that...And Free Bird. Molly Hatchet's Flirting With Disaster I can't hear too many times. It was my recently late brother's favorite song and I printed out he lyrics and now I know why. Besides, Molly Hatchet is as good as Lynnard Skynnard any day!

[Stella Armour]

love this Jacob, you see the mind is still active and willing, the memories still exhilarating..it's the body that doesn't cope as well haha... never mind the dance lives on beautifully and you paint it well :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Stella.
j.

[Jimmy Yetts]

Novel portrayal.
Quite colorful and decidedly imaginative.
Impressive work!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Jimmy----

j.

[DIVYA]

spastic inclinations
trampoline reactions

fifty years lying in state
memory just as alive
as then
heart still bouncing in dazed delight


now my mind is in a rubber room of touch
i still feel movement on a floor of osculation
and lose my balance

thanks for the dance.


I love this. I love this. I love this!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, DIVYA....
j.

[Bacchus]

Enough with the tongues...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for stopping by, Bacchus.
j.

[Corset]

you would make an adorable Roger Rabbit

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Corset...ha ha

j.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

First love remembered and savoured and so unforgettable even after fifty years. The excitement the thrill, the first touch, first kiss and all still as vibrant as then. I don't know how you find so many excellent metaphors with which say your piece Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, John,

j.