8 drenched lines

8 drenched lines

 

 

there is a sort of blue leaning

in your eyes

as we part lips

and I walk into the rain swept memory

 

that will hold me

until your rainbow

peeks into my sky

once again.

 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

6/8/13

Reviews

[ms. barrie]

this is simply exquisite...your amazing dictation, searing talent for penning such profound beauty is always a feast upon the reader’s senses.
thank you for sharing...
barrie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind review, barrie.
j.

[ms. barrie]

you’re welcome, jacob (:

[marilyn 1225]

gripping love

wow!!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you , marilyn.
j.

[Jimmy Yetts]

Lovely bit of work.
"Until we meet, again" far more beautifully said.
Be waitin' on that rainbow!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Jimmy..

j.

[Bacchus]

sounds like she's still got you.

[Bacchus]

Rainbows are the perfect combination of heartache and hope

[jacob erin-cilberto]

it's true...they always have two meanings.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

breath held in hope that is hopeless as a heart holds on to the warmth it tasted once a time ago, sad and poignant.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your poetic reply , John.
j.

[DIVYA]

Makes me think of sunshine and warmth and hope. Rainbows are beautiful, especially when they arise in clear, rainswept skies.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, they are...thank you, DIVYA...you are a kind poet...
j.

[Ardra]

until your rainbow
peeks into my sky
once again.

Ah...that's some line Jacob :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you Galadriel....

j.