street corner renderings

street corner renderings

 

 

indigent feelings

poorer prophecies of dire happiness

smiles for quarters dropped in a guitar case

 

we kissed on the street before we met

my heart spent a fortune on you

a stranger

 

i wished to own that guitar

to play a song of surprise

and just to have you tip me 

a "love you"

even if you didn't mean it

and were really put off by my threadbare demeanor

 

patches aren't beautiful

but one surmise of you 

is almost pretentious in

the elegance of your moment

 

 

even after the reality disappears

or if it never existed

 

i will play for you

with or without the guitar.

 

 

erin-cilberto

10/9/17

Reviews

[Alfred Kukitz]

Oh the ballad of the poet sings in sweet sincerity!

regards,
al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Al.
j.

[Einstein Noodle]

let it all hang out ...the blues will have there way with us ...willing or not ...love the persona of your man on the street ..could-a-been me easy ... even if the "coulda", woulda" ... she will never hear the singing ... some things are just not meant to be i think ;( what a fine poem..wonderful read for me
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, E.
j.

[Mirror]

"indigent feelings
poorer prophecies of dire happiness
smiles for quarters dropped in a guitar case.."

That alone gave a face to the poem. the strong imagery colored my mind with wonders of how this voice look like as a person. The personification and mytonymy of the opening verse, caressed my mind "...indigent feelings
poorer prophecies of dire happiness
smiles for quarters dropped in a guitar case"

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Mirror.....
j.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Oh I relate! Falling but being so distant from that peach, out of reach, no juices to savor. Unrequited love is the toughest of them all and yet we still yearn for its joy! As always an amazingly constructed piece Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, John

j.

[Ardra]

even after the reality disappears
or if it never existed

i will play for you
with or without the guitar.

:) so sweet poem with a tinge of unrequited love

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Galadriel----
j.

[kitty]

I once wrote, "Play me!" relating to that guitar but also conveying a naughty undertone. This submission is great. Like your style/presentation! Brings music to the reader's ears. 'Play me that melody, that brings back memories of days that used to be!'

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, kitty...
j.

[kitty]

You are most welcome!

[marilyn 1225]

a love love love poem gorgeous!!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, marilyn...appreciate your words.
j.

[Ana B.]

oh my, this is amazing! ''my heart spent a fortune on you'' - this is a priceless one. This is one of the most touching love letters i have ever read. Outstanding as always dear Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind review, Ana.
j.