diagram me

diagram me

A Poem by jacob erin-cilberto


diagram me



i spend hours in your dreams
and you still don't notice me
just as in the awakening
you walk right by my daydreams
not even a turn of the head,
the slightest peruse
i am part of the sentence
you ignore,
the article, the helping verb
the preposition

the fragment in the scheme of things
never your complete thought
i would give my life
just to be a phrase in your peripheral

but the less you see of me
the more i fade into a bookmark
a leaf between your pages
only for show
but shown no affection

i could be an important adjective
for the noun of you

but to you
less is more

and i am more or less
expendable 

in your essay eyes


erin-cilberto
10/10/17

© 2017 jacob erin-cilberto



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wow!!! I have enjoyed reading this one, this one is very beautifully written Jacob.

Posted 2 Days Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Days Ago

thank you for your kind words, Cassie.
j.
If only the visible could feel or see the invisible like a shadow we follow unnoticed.

Posted 1 Week Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Week Ago

yes, if only....thank you, andrew.
j.
i could be an important adjective
for the noun of you

Fantastic! Using the parts of speech to describe unrequited love is wonderful. Unfortunately, life can not be diagrammed as easily as a sentence can be. Lydi**

Posted 1 Week Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Week Ago

true, somehow those infinitives screw everything up...:)

thank you my friend.
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I think the problem is everyone is using electric notebooks and their blinded by the light. Batteries come included :(.

Enjoyed your poem. Thanks for sharing.

Posted 1 Week Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Week Ago

appreciate your words, Joe.
j.
Heartbreakingly beautiful…

Posted 1 Week Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Week Ago

thank you Momzilla.
j.
MomzillaNC

1 Week Ago

👍🏻 😎
It caused me to think about diagraming sentences and in your case the absolute significance of a major diagram of life.

regards,
al

Posted 1 Week Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Week Ago

thank you for your kind review, Al.
j.
The despair has been portrayed to perfection. loved the write :)
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Posted 1 Week Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Week Ago

thank you, Anand...
j.
This is so damn beautiful! I can relate heavily, as I've faded into a bookmark so many times lately. I believe many people feel this way, utterly invisible, beyond romantic ideas of human connection & including the more far-reaching epidemic of broken communications causing rampant divisions. There's an intense wistfulness here that comes across very hauntingly (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 1 Week Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Week Ago

thank you for your kind review, Margie.
j.
I see you were considerate enough not to incorporate the gerund in your plea for diagramming. Besides putting it on stilts, it has been my experience that most folks don't really know what to do with this part of speech. (Though, being an English prof, you, no doubt, do.)
"diagram me" is typically clever and deeply insightful. Just another day at the office, for you.

Posted 1 Week Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Week Ago

ha ha...poor gerunds....thank you for your kind words...and the smile, Jimmy.
j.
but the less you see of me
the more i fade into a bookmark
a leaf between your pages
only for show
but shown no affection

i feel the same way as John has explained... like the teacher in love with a much younger aged student who is not bothered about how he feels about her :P

but the poem is sad yet beautiful...

Posted 1 Week Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Week Ago

wow, so interesting to get two interpretations of that direction...thank you, Galadriel.
j.
Galadriel

1 Week Ago

it kind of felt like the age gap is huge that...the poet is not able to approach the lady with too m.. read more

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jacob erin-cilberto
jacob erin-cilberto

Carbondale, IL



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Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at two community colleges and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. Friending works two ways. If we have had .. more..

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