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the other side of a raindrop

the other side of a raindrop

A Poem by jacob erin-cilberto

the other side of a raindrop

 

 

 

no letting up

 

 

steady rain,

             like dreary heartbeats

 

       finds its way to welcoming grass

unaccustomed to a show of tears

 

an embracing strike of lightning

       finds its way to a welcoming tree

 

wanting to die

it gladly splits in two

thankful for baring of soul

 

 

insides opened up to night's confession

 

steady rain,

              the heartbeats race in clouded step

 

it's almost time for the storm to subside

 

i wish i could.

 

 

10/22/17


© 2017 jacob erin-cilberto



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Sweet, plaintive, contemplative, sad....beautiful title, language, form, flow, simile, metaphor. Imagery so superbly evocative, as nature feels human and human feels nature. “For everything, turn, turn, turn, there is a season” Masterpiece. Saving to re-read. Thank you for sharing your brilliance j.

Posted 1 Year Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Year Ago

thank you for your kind words, Annette...
j.
again, this is moving and oh so beautifully written with passion the ending is sad and hits the reader hard
another fabulous contribution!!

Posted 1 Year Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Year Ago

thank you for your kind words, marilyn
j.
marilyn 1225

1 Year Ago

You deserve them,
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BBP
Like this, it's like nature mirroring the sad soul of the writer. The name reeled me in and the words got me reading! Nice job J

Posted 1 Year Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Year Ago

thank you for your kind review, BBP...
j.
I love stories about the rain.a somber story described wonderfully with every word.well done

Posted 1 Year Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Year Ago

thank you for your kind words, KC.
j.
The tears took long to come but when they did, the storm took its own course. Such is the sorrow, locked up in our hearts. So moving a read...

Posted 1 Year Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Year Ago

thank you for your kind review, DIVYA.
j.
An emotionally charged weather report jacob. Wonderful metaphors as the protagonist tears himself apart with misery and pain.

Posted 1 Year Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Year Ago

thank you, John...
j.
Stunningly lovely metaphors cause me to wonder what, exactly, you are wishing for--the cessation of your inner storm or the baring of your soul.
Whatever the case, Jacob, primo stuff!

Posted 1 Year Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Year Ago

thank you, Jimmy...

j.

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jacob erin-cilberto

Carbondale, IL



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Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at two community colleges and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. Friending works two ways. If we have had .. more..

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