an Atheist's love affair

an Atheist's love affair

A Poem by jacob erin-cilberto

 

an Atheist’s love affair

 

i am a dangling modifier

with nothing left to modify

a verb with no conjugation

as a pastor with no congregation

 

my will is assigned to a nameless estate

a numb poem given away

by a posthumous heart

that still beats

but with complete insensitivity

caring was once the subject of my sentence

 

but now i am semantically slain

a coffined connoisseur of poetic religion

 

a theatrical theme kneeling in a pew

praying for redemption

but apathy

is like an arthritis 

that won't let me get up again

 

i saw you just before the pause

captured by your fragmented nature

thought i could edit you into a fool-proofed love 

 

but intentions are often misplaced

and now i am an adjective with no future

 

and you are a past participle

slandering me with your run-on declensions

 

making me your perfectly written heretic.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

10/22/17


© 2017 jacob erin-cilberto



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As much a grammarian's love affair as an atheist's.
Clever and insightful metaphors; first two lines, a powerful opening.
Work to be admired.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

3 Weeks Ago

thank you for your kind review, Jimmy.
j.
This is hauntingly similar to how desolate my love life has felt in the past 20 years! If I ever let myself feel it, this is what it would feel like. I always love your ever-growing metaphorical treatments . . . it sometimes seems like the literary asides can be a place to hide & put some distance from the true desolate sensations *sigh!* Fondly, Margie

Posted 4 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

4 Weeks Ago

thank you for sharing how you related to this, Margie...

j.
"intentions are often misplaced"
Aye, so they are, more often than one can imagine... 'edit you into a fool-proofed love', that made me kinda laugh, if only that could be done lol
As always, a metaphorically brilliant write, Jacob.

Posted 4 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

4 Weeks Ago

thank you for your kind words and insights, Yumna....
j.
Dr. YumnaKay

4 Weeks Ago

You're welcome, Jacob 😊
true: only grammar holds the igneous suggestions of loves volatility. everything else is as free as fire.

your words ring so true this morning my friend...dana

Posted 4 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

4 Weeks Ago

thank you for your visit, dana...
j.
OMG- brilliance extrapolated to the quantum degree. Perfect, metaphorical, killer lines- each one can stand alone. “I am semantically slain” by your poem j. Anger, vitriol, need, punctuated by vulnerability. All gods toppled by damaged love. I bow to the Master once again. Kudos!

Posted 4 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

4 Weeks Ago

you are very kind Annette.
j.
Wow! I must be honest, I needed a dictionary to fully comprehend this. What witty metaphors, and what intelligent poetry. I adore this, Jacob!

Posted 4 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

4 Weeks Ago

thank you for your kind words, Priya.
j.
Faith in love and all the expectations that go with it, the romance and poetry is akin to religious belief (although more fairytale) and when one finds ones faith shattered it certainly feels we have no place, no role. Filled to the very brim with powerful metaphor!

Posted 4 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

4 Weeks Ago

thank you for your words, John.
j.
Your play on words is just too clever Jacob. Brilliant lines, I think Im an adjective without a future, fragmented in nature. What incredible lines lol!

Posted 4 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

4 Weeks Ago

thank you, my friend.
j.
marilyn 1225

4 Weeks Ago

genius - with a heart.and a super man's poetic talent!!!

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jacob erin-cilberto

Carbondale, IL



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Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at two community colleges and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. Friending works two ways. If we have had .. more..

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