fictitiously real run-on

fictitiously real run-on

A Poem by jacob erin-cilberto

fictitiously real run-on


you have a gruesome beauty
fair skin, unfair heart
you lay waste to those who love you
your sky falls upon them
creating false dimensions
of drenched vision
weather beaten dreams

your effervescent eyes pierce through walls
they fall down
like the men you level with your
twisted betrayals
as you carelessly comma-splice
your life together
with theirs

rocky trust crumbles
into bleached stone
you whitewash the truth
into your truth
constantly averting a life sentence---

i thought about writing you into a poem
but you're not worth words
a semi-colon
or a period
of attention

and there is a gruesome beauty
in that.



erin-cilberto
11/25/17

© 2017 jacob erin-cilberto



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You did write her into a poem and there was "gruesome beauty in that."
One stark portrait of a heartless vixen.
Hung with her, myself, for a while--far too long a while.
Outstanding poetry!


Posted 2 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Weeks Ago

some people are just users...and like Bill Withers sang..."you just keep on using me, until you use .. read more
Such hurt can never be hidden behind the salvation of dissociation. That is a mere delusion as we struggle to make sense of how someone who meant so much to us could fool us so completely.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Weeks Ago

thank you for your kind review, John.
j.
These words must be read slowly and savoured, for they are fine words indeed and the message they deliver hits home in a no punches pulled manner to leave us gasping..... and there is a gruesome beauty in that..........N

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Weeks Ago

thank you for your words, Neville,
j.
Wow! Tense and defiant!

I think all of us can relate to your words in this piece; male or female. Most all of us have had our experiences with such people; those who come into our vision as an epitome of beauty and affection, yet leave it in time fully revealed....gruesome and coldhearted to the core. We are shattered and left in pain and soon wonder what on earth did we see in them in the first place. Only then do we truly realise that they were not worth our time.

This is quite a defiant write and tinged with the anger, pain and sadness of true experience.

Boldly written and exceptionally executed, as always.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Weeks Ago

thank you for your kind review, Doodley,
j.

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jacob erin-cilberto
jacob erin-cilberto

Carbondale, IL



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Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at two community colleges and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. Friending works two ways. If we have had .. more..

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