Form vs Content

Form vs Content

A Poem by jacob erin-cilberto

Form vs. Content


composed kisses
lips exposed to irony
passion reserved
the scent of you ignored
standing tall against reeling backwards

removal of heart
but vivid recall
of another,
chaotic impressions
stream of consciousness in silent tongues

improvisation of hands
fingers touching keys
caressing the skin of letters
we are poetry in motionless sync

i am inside your stanza
and we are hyphenated syllables
revised too many times
to suit
the ties too stiff to flow

i want to surmise the other poem
the old one
was worth writing
even if the theme is 
outdated---

and i will never write like that again. 

© 2017 jacob erin-cilberto



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Awesome collection of loosely bundled observations and admittedly just a little ephemeral for my literal reading abilities, but I still love watching the way you string together the most fresh & original ideas as you plant universal themes in the reader's mind, soon to blossom into an array of interest! *smile* Fondly, Margie

Posted 1 Week Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Week Ago

you are such a kind reviewer, thank you, Margie.
j.
Jacob,

You are like a stream of originality floating into my mind and heart in joyous gratefulness.

Regards,
Al

Posted 1 Week Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Week Ago

you are very kind, Al...
thank you

j.
“I am inside your stanza”- eloquent metaphoric assessment of a relationship of two people who are now only “hyphenated syllables”.. the form and the content of love re-created too many times. The poet remembers the first perfect draft- this poem is filled with pathos and perhaps regret..

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jacob erin-cilberto

1 Week Ago

thank you for your kind review, Annette.
j.
Cleverly written Jacob reminded me of a song “ getting to know you!”lovely contrasting metaphors.

Posted 1 Week Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Week Ago

thank you for your words, andrew.
j.
i am reminded also of the "discussions" words vs music .. which should predominate ..
what a devastation of love "Form vs Content" is .. i feel as tho i remain in a state of crumbling holdings ..it is cruel you know :( and a glance back at the more spontaneous flexible movement together ... even more cruel ... i think this one is particularly good jacob ..very emotive ..great language and metaphors .. an edge better than your normal fantastic even :)
ouch!
E.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Weeks Ago

thank you for your very kind review, E.
j.
This feels like a loveless marriage.
But the couple still go through the motions in public.
But it wasn't always like that.
Time back, there was love a kicking.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Weeks Ago

yes there was...thank you, Paul.
j.
Seems to be saying: and I will never love like that again.
Was the old love--the outdated love--worth experiencing?
My guess is, it was.
Uniquely perceptive poetry!

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Weeks Ago

i think it was, yes....thank you for your words, Jimmy.
I never try to find a pattern. You have always seemed to keep one. It has always had the touch of the romantic You still manage to shock me. I know you will again.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Weeks Ago

thank you for your kind words, Jon.
j.
This poem makes me think of verisimilitude and how repetition and time give things the illusion of being true. That ending felt like a nod of recognition that it isn't. More fine words from you appreciated.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Weeks Ago

thank you for your kind review Dionysian...
j.
Two mused in love make the greatest collaboration.

Clever as always sir.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Weeks Ago

thank you, Dale,
j.

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jacob erin-cilberto

Carbondale, IL



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Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at two community colleges and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. Friending works two ways. If we have had .. more..

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