trigger happy

trigger happy

 

 

the arsenal is fired

all the words sullenly sprayed

you were hit,

hurt

bled out

 

and years later

i am still living with the guilt

of murdering your heart

 

my grave is an empty doorway

a blue sky with a patch of red

only i see with distorted emotion

and the barrel still smoking

 

with regret.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

12/20/17

Reviews

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Superbly insightful, self-indicting poem. Murderer, judge and jury all in one man. Love shot through the heart with only “a blue sky with a patch of red” as a witness. Wonderful imagery and metaphor. Regret as a smoking gun- great!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Annette.
j.

[penguin]

probably my most favorite of yours. the idea that someone is only good or bad, black and white, is too simple. Guilt has never been played into that. i like hearing both sides to a story, especially ones like these. great poem

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Penguin.
j.

[Corset]

I believe what goes around comes around, how many hearts will leave us bleeding for years, the past can not be changed but regrets can be released to the forgiving nature of the season, we often do things that are rash, but the people we scar along the way will scar someone else, it is the way of it, we rarely get what we think we want, we always get what we need, what we do to appreciate what we get is up to us. Love this..to me it say forgive oneself and be forgiven or hold it and the wound stays red.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i really like your thoughts on this one, Corset...thank you for your profound interpretation...it is better than the poem...
j.

[Corset]

never, but it's cool of you to think so XD

[Paul Bell]

I've known people who haven't spoken for years over words. A punch to the head probably causes less harm. But i suppose it shows you how powerful words are. Wars seem to start over them. They'll be a Chinese proverb for this. But i don't it.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Paul.
j.

[marilyn 1225]

this one is one of my favorites... i was at one time on the receiving end of shooting words
your regret and remorse is Beautiful i wish that person could read this poem too..
great great work

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, marilyn.
j.

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

Wow u used the gun n shot allegory so creatively n effectively to show regret n the enormity of the emotions. Kudos I must say.
I'm a newbie here, pls review, comment my first poem here, wud luv to know your thoughts, I'm navigating the site looking for poetic interaction,

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review...
j.

[Anthony (aka Mr.e)]

Guilt is one of the hardest emotions I've ever had to deal with, still is.
Really enjoyed this...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i hear you on that Mr. e....

and i was raised Catholic...ah...that's it in a nutshell.
thanks for your words,
j.

[Einstein Noodle]

great wisdom in this one says i...once the words are loosed there is no taking back ..ever... we may get some forgiveness ..its the forgetting that lingers ..well said jacob
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, E.
j.