stream of consciousness with no conscience

stream of consciousness with no conscience

 

 

intermediate adjectives

identify proper people

with improper verbiage

and adverb hands modify too closely

 

in uncomfortable font

an abomination of silent language

which needs to be double-spaced

but is too close upon

ears abused from the din

 

there are sentences for this

and they should be long and complex

with no periods

ever,

 

run-on, run-on, run-on,

well deserved.

 

 

erin-cilberto

1/27/18

Reviews

[Jimmy Yetts]

A "stream of consciousness with no conscience" is dangerously polluted.
They doth protest too much regarding grievances never properly conceived nor, therefore, clearly cited.
Maybe.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insights, Jimmy.
j.

[Lydia Shutter]

"proper people with improper verbiage"....seems that there are far too many of those people around these days and I can't even think of the right adjectives to pin on them! The collective hearing of the country has been abused lately....no doubt of that. Long complex sentences can not adequately describe the world these days. Again, your words are just enough to spark thought....and I like that. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind and insightful review, Lydi.
j.

[Chris]

Creative writing for the unwary...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Chris.
j.

[andrew mitchell]

This reads for me like a rowdy disruptive crowd maybe demonstrating and everyone not involved wants them to just move on. That’s my take lol.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

interesting interpretation, andrew...i like that.
thank you,
j.