Craps

Craps

A Poem by jacob erin-cilberto


Craps

 

 

tumbling dice

boxed set of returns on love

playing against concrete walls of my mind

 

you win every time

and i go home broke

with my empty pockets missing you

 

you roll your smile at me

and i bet the house

then sit alone watching a blank screen

of a deserted city block

waiting for you to walk into the picture

 

in a digital daze

my HD heart has too much clarity

 

you use me for your purse

and personal gain

then you run between the buildings laughing

 

and i end up too many stories higher

than my expectations

which long ago

jumped from the top floor

of reason.

 

 

erin-cilberto

2/9/18

© 2018 jacob erin-cilberto


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I like this poem overall, but these lines really knock my socks off:
"you roll your smile at me
and i bet the house
then sit alone watching a blank screen
of a deserted city block
waiting for you to walk into the picture"
You always have an amazing depth of ideas to play with! Your imagination knows no bounds! *smile* Fondly, Margie

Posted 6 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

6 Years Ago

thank you for your kind review, Margie.
j.
Gads! You appear to be playing against a stacked deck. (Yeah, I know that's not a "craps" reference--but, what the hell!)
Jumping "from the top floor of reason" is an impressive line; at least, you made it to the top floor.
Top floor of poetry, too.

Posted 6 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

6 Years Ago

thank you for your words, Jimmy,

j.
Very interesting interplay of images and the last lines deliver a punch. Great work!

Posted 6 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

6 Years Ago

thank you for your kind words, Leslie...

j.
Expectations....they are the downfall of many. When one person in a relationship uses another without truly caring at all, well, the other person becomes a sort of puppet. A "now you see me, now you don't" relationship plays with emotions and is not healthy. Great metaphor again. Lydi**

Posted 6 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

6 Years Ago

thank you for your kind review, Lydi...
j.
I know I say “brilliant” too often, but when it comes to you dear j., no other word will do. So..Brilliant language, form, metaphor, wordplay, cadence, imagery...every line and verse original, adroit and cutting- edge...there is no Lucky 7 in this game of love- the house always takes all..”my expectations which long ago jumped from the top floor of reason”- precise, concise, shattering..perfect work!

Posted 6 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

6 Years Ago

thank you for your kind review, Annette,
j.

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jacob erin-cilberto
jacob erin-cilberto

Carbondale, IL



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Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at a community college and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. I am here to read for inspiration from other po.. more..

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