the friendly drop

the friendly drop

 

 

lovely poison

eyes dilated by her somber bones 

lying in wait for the end

we kiss deep into the shallows

of my submissive heart

 

i am aware of her label

but i drink intensely

consequences never have an expiration date

we return lips to their rightful place

even if no breath emerges between them.

 

 

erin-cilberto

3/19/18

Reviews

[Resa]

Very original !
Nicely done,
I really enjoyed the read,
thank you!
Resa

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Resa.
j.

[θεά]

Quite open to interpretation. Whose lips? Lover's or liquor's? Well done.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Mallika....
j.

[DIVYA]

Awe-inspiring. Your poetry here.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, DIVYA, you are very kind.
j.

[DIVYA]

It was such a pleasure to read this poem, Mr. Jacob!

[Ghost]

A sad write, but it is a sadly true one.. To many people search for the easy way out and sometimes the poison is what takes them to it. Such a truthful write

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Ghost.
j.

[Sami Khalil]

So true and wisely said from an experienced and well practiced in life and relationships. It is so important to know that everything we say or do have consequences and even choices too as your powerful poem rightly states. You are amazing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Sami.
j.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome, sir Jacob.

[Jimmy Yetts]

The line most will highlight is: "consequences never have an expiration date."
It could also be said, the cause of those consequences is often too quickly forgotten.
Resulting in people eventually feeling as if "the fates" are cruelly and pointlessly victimizing them.
Maybe better memories would humble most of us; dispelling the weak notion that we don't deserve exactly what we're getting.
Exceptional work!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for the kind review, Jimmy.
j.

[CD Campbell]

It is hard to put down anything that is enjoyably intoxicating, even if we know that there is price to be paid at the end of it. Women, liquor, a good book of poetry. It all comes to an end. But, my friend, there is always another bottle and book to buy. Great use of metaphor on your part. Respect. CD

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, there always are new books, and that last drink of the night.
thank you for your words, CD...
j.

[look.both.ways]

I loved this. speaks to a part of me that is hard to speak to. good job.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, look both ways.
j.

[Kelly Scheppers]

"i am aware of her label
but i drink intensely
consequences never have an expiration date"

I have learned to never say never. It kicks me in the a*s every time when I do! Cheers, Jacob!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Kelly.
j.

[Neville]

There are probably many ways of reading/interpreting these beautiful yet emotionally charged words of yours & I have no doubt at all before long, they will be. For my part however, I sense a final or the ultimate parting..........Cheers jacob... Neville

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Neville.
j.

[Neville]

My pleasure..............N