symbiotic sabotage

symbiotic sabotage

my words toss and turn                         

substantiate invasion

restless expression

erin-cilberto

4/22/18

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

This can be read on so many levels, but I sensed negativity and found it unsettling.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insight, Christine.
j.

[...]

You can always turn words into meaning of love aND gentle thoughts. Otherwise nice provocative writing. Words can harm and can make certai b reactions in certain people. For example at me. When somebody said there is white field. I will tell,white can change into black and black k can became more bright then white.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, black is often more bright than white....i like that. And thank you for your words, Martin.
read moreyes, black is often more bright than white....i like that. And thank you for your words, Martin.
j.

[...]

Yes I sometimes work with autistic people. And they always give me another point of view and lot of inspiration. . Great poem.

[sette]

there is stress somewhere while writing this poem

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your thoughts, sette.
j.

[sette]

you are most welcome jacob

[Einstein Noodle]

man! i can sure feel the creative tension ...power packed senryu my friend... your title alone reminds me of just before i get a migraine ... what starts out innocent brings us down .. i love this one! already read it several times ... very emotive ..so many "takes" can be made on it .. well done sir!
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, E.
j.

[Neville]

I reckon our cerebral hemispheres must be intrapsychically linked jacob..... almost my thoughts precisely..... now there's a twist on eyes wide shut if ever there was.... I love it when you craft these my friend, they make my mind tingle.............Best..... Neville

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words...and yes, "eyes wide shut" such an interesting film.
j.

[Neville]

pleasure sir and it was all mine........Neville