poetry ice dances within her

poetry ice dances within her

 

 

 

tragic avalanche

the buried lies of love

and you,

 

smiling from beneath your white sheet

drained of heart

only the frozen tundra is left 

from what you were when i met you

 

saw a picture

recent expression

and wrote a few words

trying to warm you up

 

but the frostbite had set in

and your heart was too far gone

to save.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

4/22/18

Reviews

[Ms Paragon]

So sad to see the love lost in the eyes of someone that once meant the world to you.Beautifully written!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Ms. Paragon.
j.

[Ms Paragon]

You're welcome!

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

ahhh not dissapointed again Jacob as usual beautiful words put together

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Julie.
j.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

People change and that is the sad truth especially to us who remain the same...
Something anyone can relate on...
Thanks for sharing this, sir.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Dhaye.
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

Honest, true and wonderful words shared my friend. When a woman decide. She is done. Man must release and escape. Can't raise the dead or a pissed-off woman. Thank you Jacob for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, can't raise the dead...so true...thank you, Coyote.
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Jacob. I enjoyed this poem.

[CD Campbell]

The cold hearted are on a different level. There is this fantasy that we can warm them and turn them into humans with real emotions, but it is a fallacy that we learn over and over. They're usually pretty good at math. CD

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful words, CD...
j.

[Neville]

Seems like you are on a roll jacob... you are producing some amazing stuff my friend and these fine words are no exception, keep rolling.....................Neville

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Neville...
j.

[Neville]

Hey, my pleasure......

[Chris Shaw]

Ice maiden from the past, haunting you. You still want to melt the ice in her heart, but whatever heat and warmth that you once shared, is no longer there. I am detecting some emotional negativity, an element of bitterness maybe from what happened between you. Great poetry and the coldness, comes across very well.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Christine...
j.