clarity is the genius of existence

clarity is the genius of existence

 

 

and the years in serpentine appearance

muddled retrospect,

once the clarity of longevity of love

 

now ashes lie next to each other

in urns turned towards the sunsets

and nature's whispers bow to the memory

of old flames once shooting stars

in pristine sky of youth

then raising youth

then being razed by the very hand that made them

 

unmade bodies

years spent bound hand in hand

then minds floating away together

love never really dies

because souls always have forever

 

in which to dance.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

8/5/18

Reviews

[andrew mitchell]

lets hope so jacob. thoughts to ponder.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, andrew.
j.

[Cherrie Palmer]

In the heart love takes spark and they eternity they shall never part.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Cherrie.
j.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

The eternal youth of eternal love or the eternal love of eternal youth...either way, eternity is a very long time. Here's to finding the right music to listen to in the den while our date gets ready.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, eternity is a long time.

thank you, Fabian, your words are appreciated.
j.

[Jon Roggie]

There will always be a time to dance.
Nice write.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, yes, thank you, Jon.
j.

[Chris Shaw]

now ashes lie next to each other
in urns towards the sunsets

Utterly beautiful, touched my soul

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Chris.

[Neville]

Without any doubt, these words are beautiful and of course, timeless.... Neville

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Neville,
j.

[Neville]

pleasure....

[barleygirl]

Brilliant! These lines are so stunning:
"of old flames once shooting stars
in pristine sky of youth
then raising youth
then being razed by the very hand that made them"
Always a pleasure to read you, my friend (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Margie.
j.

[Corset]

Gorgeous Jacob, I adore it when you get sentimental , I always love a happy ending but even the saddest of poems can still be beautiful as this one is! New Fav!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Corset.
j.

[Einstein Noodle]

beautiful jacob...really appreciate the serenity this poem leads us to in closing ... yin and yang ... fire and ice ...both hurt and joy ... your poem makes me feel the all present connection we have to the Natural world as well as the Spiritual .. what an inspiring piece ... one to think about for a while ... i feel kind of blissful ;)
E.
ps. i just realized... i think i have a poem on clarity as well...yes! i did...i would love to have you read it ... if i did this right it should be found here:
http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/rIGt2mAk3/1789300/
i love how poets think along so many similar lines .. but saying different things in all our unique voices :) let me know what you think

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, E. and now on to your poem.

j.

[sette]

the lines are really wonderfully written.. full of metaphor... i like the last 2 lines immensely

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, sette....appreciate your kind words.
j.