specifically in random pursuit

specifically in random pursuit

 

 

i am elsewhere at the moment

so don't look into my eyes

you will see clear glass

with nothing on the other side.

 

i would like to be here

but she isn't,

so i am everywhere but where 

i want to be

 

and if the eyes really are the window of the soul

mine is somewhere weeping

somewhere creeping 

into that dark cavern of memory

 

and there,

it will stay

for a moment or two, or three or four

 

wherefore art thou?

forever near

&

 

forever there,

 

where i want to be.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

3/12/19

Reviews

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Love that opening stanza! I think it describes so well the feelings of dissociation and depersonalisation we feel at times of trauma. You have cornered the market on lost love and pining Jacob. No one can touch your amazing collection of allegory.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, John,
j.

[Autumn L Gibbs]

I love the way you orchestrated the poem. I often find myself lost in thoughts and starring off into space.
A.G.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Autumn,
j.

[Autumn L Gibbs]

You are so welcome,Autumn,
A.G.

[Lydia Shutter]

Wow, Jacob! I so relate to this one. Sometimes the mind wanders so far off, the eyes can not grasp the emotion. The longing in this poem is powerful. The "dark cavern of memory" can be a blessing or a curse. This is one of my favorites from you. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Lydi,
j.

[kentuck14]

It is so true that being truly "present" with someone who as Gertrud said so well . . . "The there is just ain't there." How about anther cliche? "It takes two to tango." Or . . . " a bird in hand is worth two in the bush." Okay, I'll quit! Oh . . . and as you put it . . . "Where art thou? Interesting poem my friend.
T.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

no, keep going...i love it...
thanks for the smile, Tom,
j.

[Stella Armour]

This really touched my soul, it's so sad and that faraway look says it all :(

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Stella,
j.

[andrew mitchell]

Yes occupying the mind when the heart and mind have an agenda of their own which doesn’t work out their way as intended in a classic case “ it takes two to tango! A bruising affair!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, andrew,
j.

[lizardbrain]

always wanting to be somewhere else, staying here sounds so simple but is one of the most difficult tasks

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, lizardbrain,
j.

[Corset]

https://youtu.be/UzUkOc5bpDA, if this breakthrough becomes commercial candy you may never come home again.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Corset,
j.

[lua]

the use of oxymorons are really well executed here, the title of the piece is so intriguing and upon reading it, it makes complete sense
the structure compliments the train of thought of the narrator and that feeling of being elsewhere from what gives you essence and makes you whole, that other person or entity existing in a place you are not
i really enjoyed this!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, lua,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Thoughts pondering on the past while living in the present. Yes, sometimes it would be so nice to wind the clock back and live those memories again for real. I bet most people have moments like that.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Chris,
j.