if blooms could kill...

if blooms could kill...

 

 

 

a Venus Flytrap

she waited

as i buzzed with breaths

much too close, leaning on her ear

 

and then

i disappeared in love

and heard someone whisper

"isn't that a pretty flower?"

 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

3/15/19

Reviews

[lynne1313]

Really is clever. Like how you evoke a story in so few words. The title isn't just a throw-away either; it pulls me in/catches my interest but also contributes to the meaning of the rest of the poem after I've read it. Keep writing!!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, lynne...and yes, titles are of utmost importance...
j.

[andrew mitchell]

How we all fall for the trap but its getting out alive. Such a clever write Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, andrew.
j.

[R.E. Ray]

Makes me wonder if there's a "Mars Flytrap." Seems men ought to have an equivalent. I think we've all flown too closely to see and touch that beauty. Maybe I need to read that book with the referenced title. :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, we probably should..
thank you, R.E.
j.

[kentuck14]

Beauty is only skin deep . . . to toss a worn out phrase. Better to admire from a distance than get lost in a consuming relationship. At least that's what Confucius said!
T.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Tom,
j.

[redzone]

hmmm... all I heard was "trap me, trap me".... as metaphor, love is a divine trap Jacob... it is good to be eaten up by it I think.... now where can I fine one of these "flowers"???? ;0)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Curt...wish we knew exactly where.
j.

[mattavelli]

Did you hear her next victim, Jacob? I've been married eight years now, and I guess I've gotten boring. Haha

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i will let you know if i hear...:))))
thank you, mattavelli,
j.

[Dave]

It is so clear. Sometimes the flower is just too beautiful and we must be careful
not to get swallowed up in its' beauty. I enjoyed this very much.

Take care - Dave

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and sometimes getting swallowed ain't all that bad...:)
thank you, Dave
appreciate your visit and words,
j.

[Dave]

Hmmmmm - what kind of swallowing?
Never mind, I'll use my imagination.

Take care - Dave

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ha ha, metaphorically...swallowed by love...

[John Alexander McFadyen]

So sharp and so sudden in it's intensity. You have captured in a dry ascorbic piece such emotion as always eats at a soul spurned.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, John,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

You have taken me back to school days Jacob with your lines. I was fascinated by the Venus Flytrap and just how effective that plant was at trapping flies. Yes I guess it's possible that some women could act in a similar way, entrapping an unsuspecting male. Brevity, which says much.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Chris,
j.

[Lydia Shutter]

Swallowed up by love.....not such a bad thing if you ask me. Sometimes, though, the pretty flower is not what it seems. I am constantly amazed at how abundant your muse is! Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Lydi,
j.