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they actually reflect down

they actually reflect down

A Poem by jacob erin-cilberto

they actually reflect down

 

 

 

hush puppies weren't quiet enough

you heard me approach

with tentative step

and caught my eye

with laced frown

 

i thought you were a cobbler's dream

but my shoes to you were obscene

my socks didn't match

and my wallet was bare

when i saw you ready to give me the boot

 

i dug in my heel

to extend a frantic appeal

stood on my toes

so you might think me taller

but you just pivoted in your black patents

 

and invented an excuse

to walk away with your ego

shining like your shoes...

 

 

erin-cilberto

6/7/19

© 2019 jacob erin-cilberto


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Jacob erin-cilberto,
You invented a clever focus towards the symbolic way shoes carry us.
Full of symbolism and I suppose just having fun with words.
From second paragraph;
first line,
'Cobbler's dream, fourth line 'when I saw you ready to give me the boot'
third paragraph;
'I dug in my heel' 'third line, stood on my toes'
fifth line, 'but you just pivoted in you black patents'
The ending is clever and definite;
'and invented an excuse
to walk away with you ego
shining like you shoes'
Really impressive!
Blessings
Kathy



Posted 1 Week Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Week Ago

thank you for your kind review, Kathy,
j.
At least you didn't wear socks with Birkenstocks...or did you? There were always those snooty ones who thought they were better than anyone else. Hard to compete with EGO and the beating downs haunt still.
We can only hope they found their "perfect" match and that ego is larger.

A good write, j.

Posted 1 Week Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Week Ago

I am sure eventually some of them did...unfortunately the one I had a crush on was not like that...b.. read more
Ted Kniffen

1 Week Ago

That is unfortunate. Maybe she knew you liked her and she may have been as unsure as you were.
If the shoe fits . . . doesn't mean you gotta wear it! I too at a certain time wore those hush puppies . . . then desert boots . . . then GI boots. Gotta remember to tell them not to put my shoes on my feet when they put me in the furnace!! Like that last stanza!
T

Posted 1 Week Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Week Ago

you have worn many different shoes, my friend...lots of experience...
thank you for your word.. read more
WOW, I pictured a very snobby girl in elementary or high school. Those mean girls grow up to be even meaner and I don't think the damage they do ever disappears. I could see the boy trying to impress this bitchy one. A futile attempt unfortunately. No one would ever be good enough for her. Well written, Jacob. Lydi**

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Weeks Ago

thank you, Lydi...
your words are encouraging...I have really been feeling that i have been w.. read more
Lydia

2 Weeks Ago

Don't insult yourself like that! Your poetry is never crap!
these shoes were not a match unfortunately

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Weeks Ago

true...thank you, Edie.
j.
You certainly are the King of metaphors Jacob. This one is so clever. Hush puppies, that took me back in time. My Dad used to wear them. All I can say here is, you can't win them all. Your fourth stanza says it all.

Chris

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Weeks Ago

thank you for your kind words and sharing about your dad...my dad did the same...
j.
O h how I love your metaphors!!!! Brilliant one Jacob

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Weeks Ago

thank you, Julie,
j.

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jacob erin-cilberto
jacob erin-cilberto

Carbondale, IL



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Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at two community colleges and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. Friending works two ways. If we have had .. more..

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