Comfort Zone

a poem about how we all say we want to explore and be free and all that, but really most of us won't leave luxury for it

No settled feel, just roiling insides

balancing on borders, continental divides.

Hold your breath

and watch your step.

Broken syllables are to communicate.

The line to here, there is no wait. 

Forget the passport.

Grab onto the sport

of waiting 

on 

answers.

Dark sand weighs you back, uneven.

There's seasickness and no chance of leaving. 

So pack your bags, you won't need much

and join the Australian, Haitian, and Dutch

on this global endeavour. 

It will last forever.

I want out of here, just give me a taste

from home, this very special place.

Opportunity to explore,

we ask for nothing more

in a time when infinity is a bore. 

But when you take that first step,

you must hold your breath

because that feeling inside

as you balance divide

is not what you normally feel.

No comfort and sick, they're not going to heal.

You'll want to bring a bag with a seal.

Forget what you know

to traipse in the snow.

Don't leave a trail.

Forget about the mail

because when you venture alone,

you leave your comfort zone. 

Author's Note

tell me how you really feel.

Reviews

[Freedom's Child]

I love the way flow mimics the poem, so parts flowed and other were choppy and it fit the feeling and imagery perfectly. For me this took to a call for action for revolution. Great imagery and love the underlying darkness. Great piece!

[linear]

Ah so many roads I've travelled, it's not so hard to do, especially when you have no one with you......................enjoyed the rhyme's love the memories of seasons missed :O)

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

i have to say not to my taste the rhythm and the words I just felt were off sync a bit. its a good message though.

[Twistedme]

"Broken syllables are to communicate" great line. It is a true story though, people talk and thats all they do. They speak of it but never act. Trapped inside themselves. Just a life that the world has fed to us. Great poem Erin, like many of your other works :)

[Erin Thomas]

Thank you so much! You completely understood the theme. I really appreciate it! :)

[Twistedme]

10 points to gryffindor! Haha...ou spread the message through this poem really well, a great write, glad you enjoyed my thoughts :D

[Amanda]

I feel sort of confused. The last two stanzas are the best, I think.

[Erin Thomas]

Thanks!

[Ian H Morrison]

i really feel that i love it the meters are very good they give excellent foundation to your stanzas and the whole thing flows wonderfully

[Erin Thomas]

That was my goal. Thank you so much for the review! :)

[Ian H Morrison]

you are more than welcome thank you for writeing it