Desired Bliss

Desired Bliss

A Poem by Snow Angel

My muscles ache
I lack energy 
I desire to feel nothing but bliss
even if it's only short term
Although I'm content 
I crave so much more
I continue to search for inspiration
I aspire to feel nothing but exhilaration
even if its only temporary
because never ending bliss doesn't exist. 

© 2017 Snow Angel



Author's Note

Snow Angel
I really wish I didn't have to put this as note. I'm aware that I'm an amateur. I still have a lot to learn when it comes to rules of writing. I would appreciate if you would comment on positive aspects of my writing. Constructive criticism is welcomed but only if you give me an example to help me improve my writing. Please don't insult my writing. I believe were all on this site for support and not to ask "If its good enough." nor "If it's great." Thank you for taking the time to read and review my work.

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This is a beautiful longing, reaching for the places of bliss, of sweet peace, even when the soul knows such places may only be made of dreams. Always seek these deeper places, dear poet, these places of such ecstasy. Maybe one day you'll find the key to the locked doors.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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You create the need, the want and the desire in this piece. I'm buying what you're selling, I don't know the reason behind your authors note but I do not think you have any issues when it comes to writing. You have good thought process, creative flow and you speak through your mind, heart and soul which is a home run for writers. Godspeed.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


This is a beautiful longing, reaching for the places of bliss, of sweet peace, even when the soul knows such places may only be made of dreams. Always seek these deeper places, dear poet, these places of such ecstasy. Maybe one day you'll find the key to the locked doors.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like it.It's genuine, relateable and beautiful :)!

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Snow Angel

1 Month Ago

Thank you so much zaisham9393! Your're so sweet. :)
You wrap this well,
based on your views and experiences
Your desire is presented and explored with your words.
"I lack of energy " --this is a bit backward in terms of wording. You might say--I lack energy or I lack the energy--just my thoughts.
Overall, nice and well done.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Snow Angel

1 Month Ago

Thank you for your review I appreciate it. I've fixed the error you suggested. :)
Josie E. Cook M. A.

1 Month Ago

You're welcome.
:)
Erica - don't worry about "rules". Write what is in your heart and you seem to have done that here very well.

Alas, I don't believe there is such a thing as never ending bliss. Those moments of bliss are very special. We live through life in expectations of finding bliss and when we find it, it is a treasure to be cherished, but it is a momentary, short-lived thing otherwise we wouldn't appreciate it.

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Miss Bliss, you have done a fine job expressing yourself. We all love to experience bliss and it is different each one of us. Life, finds a way to humble and balance all. Your poem is very good, your use of words precise and it flows. Never stop writing. Thank you and God Bless

Sheer Terror

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I think you did a great job with this:)

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Thank you for sharing your work. It makes me consider if this is me too. Am I seeking temporary bliss?

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You are right and you are wrong.
"even if its only temporary
because never ending bliss doesn't exist. "
To keep bliss alive. Need two people with concern and some wild spirit. You are right. Everlasting bliss is hard to know. But if we are lucky. Love can teach us new kinds of bliss. Thank you Erica for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on February 20, 2017
Last Updated on September 5, 2017
Tags: desire, psychology, pain, promises, love, sad, depression, anxiety, disappointment


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