Sometimes

Sometimes

A Poem by ~LeeAnn~
"

you have to read it to understand it

"

Sometimes when your not looking

I stare at you

Sometimes when your not smiling 

I smile for you

Sometimes when you laugh

I laugh to

Sometimes when you cry

I want to cry to

Sometimes when you put your arms around me 

I melt away

Sometimes when you leave

I want you to stay

Sometimes when you lie to me

I hide the pain that I don't want you to see

Sometimes when you tell me "I Love You"

I wonder if it is true

 

© 2009 ~LeeAnn~


Author's Note

~LeeAnn~
You may not like this poem but it is how I felt the day that I wrote it.

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I like the this piece. I feel that it has potential to be expanded on; however, that is just my opinion. I think you show how we all feel when we are deep in love with someone and there is confusion of trust, or a slight obsession.

There are some typos:

smileing= smiling
the third and forth sometimes is written as sometime
whe in the second to last line, I think you meant when


I hope this helped you. Good write.

`H. Duane Sharpe

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Wow.
I liked this poem.
It shows deep emotion of love which is one of my favorite genres.

Posted 14 Years Ago


i liked this poem!!

really shows ur emotions when u wrote this

Posted 14 Years Ago


I liked this poem a lot. I think that a lot of people feel this way so even though this may have been how you were feeling on one particular day many people can relate to it. Including me. =)
I think the repetition and simplistic language add a lot to the feeling this poem expresses. It's also what makes it universal.
"Sometimes when you lie to me
I hide the pain
that I don't want you to see"
I feel the last of these three lines interrupts the flow of the poem, but I tend to be overly critical of things like this. Overall it was a very enjoyable read.
Thanx for writing.
♥Destiny♥


Posted 14 Years Ago


I know exactly what you feel here with this... I often wondered... if what love was being felt towards me... was really love. How she'd always be sad, but even if I was sad, I'd smile and be happy. I like how your poetry gives the reader your feeings, as if I am the one reliving the experience and feelings (Which at least, is the effect you've given me) I enjoy reading your poetry :)

Posted 14 Years Ago


I like the this piece. I feel that it has potential to be expanded on; however, that is just my opinion. I think you show how we all feel when we are deep in love with someone and there is confusion of trust, or a slight obsession.

There are some typos:

smileing= smiling
the third and forth sometimes is written as sometime
whe in the second to last line, I think you meant when


I hope this helped you. Good write.

`H. Duane Sharpe

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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