The Grace of the Gifted

The Grace of the Gifted

A Poem by ewest1220
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What beauty lies within my mind?

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The Grace of the Gifted

By: Ethan West


What beauty lies within my mind?

In which my heart is all but vague

What precious perils are benign

And why was love I killed now saved?


She came across me as I worked

My mind on anything but love

She saw my value, knew my worth

And brought me heaven like a dove


And now my restless soul does rest

It lies awake in turmoil's sleep

For my old wound bound heart to breast

Within her eyes so dark and deep


And as a tear fell from her eye

My heart lay bare in my own face

I held within a stifled sigh

And now I want to fill the space


Can you allow me this one grace?

That I may now beside you lay

To see the beauty of this place

And in your heart, forever stay

© 2012 ewest1220


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We all do tend to go through what you described as transition or where we cross that bridge from getting hurt and having been living the shadow of the same person for so long to the idea of caring for someone else. I am a huge believer in love and know that it can happen for those who really want it.

The character seems to be someone who is ready to look for the next person who could bring a healthy heart into his life. You succeeded in creating an impression of effectiveness. Good job!

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I like it! Well done Ethan!

Posted 5 Years Ago


If I were to offer any critiques at all, it would be to play with the imperfect rhyme of "vague" and "saved", then, to use other words than "love" and "dove", which are so overdone as to make them trite to an undiscerning reader.
IF I was, that is...but I'm NOT! I am so delighted to find a writer as young as yourself who is so in-touch with his emotional self, AND is not afraid to be unfashionable, and embrace the Olde Formes with the same apparent ease as you have here done. The emotions and the manner and proficiency with which you have portrayed them would do credit to a Shelley, or a WB Yeats. You have made an old rhymer very happy this day!

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49 Years Ago

This is lovely. I like it! Good job! Keep writing! :)

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49 Years Ago

Awe! This is absolutely adorable. Marvelous poem! I honestly cannot express how much I love this, excellent job!

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How lovely to read such a romantic poem at the end of a long summer day, when anything else takes too much energy! This, on the other hand, is so refershing to read and is so full of hope: it reminded me of past romances from long ago, when anything could hapen, if only one was ready for it!

Loved it, especially the lines:
"She saw my value, knew my worth
And brought me heaven like a dove"

Thx for sharing,
Lizbeth

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49 Years Ago

A lovely poem, with a smooth rhythm :)

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49 Years Ago

it is very nice and sublime piece of writing.i love your poems a lot.........they are so enthralling to read........

"And as a tear fell from her eye
My heart lay bare in my own face
I held within a stifled sigh
And now I want to fill the space"..i liked this stanza a lot.....i sorely like the diction which you used in it.it is really a great poetry!!!!!!

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There is only one word that I can find to describe it: Hummana( that means good to a crazy mind)

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Perfect rhythm and meter, as always, and a sweet pleading at the end. I think I'm in love. ;)

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49 Years Ago

I have to say i f*****g love the stanza

And as a tear fell from her eye
My heart lay bare in my own face
I held within a stifled sigh
And now I want to fill the space
Just brilliant, love it man!!!

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Tags: Poem, Dark, Reflective, Love

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