Regret

Regret

By: Ethan West

The grass sways in time with my heart

Funny how these things do start

I was not here a moment ago

But now that I am, I am here for the show

My spirit elated I run through the grass

The grandest of things I hurriedly past

Till found myself at the end of my path

My heart had then sunk at my pitiful laugh

My journey was over and now it had ended

The beautiful grass and field no more

I ran through it all and never respected

The beauty of life I would leave evermore

Author's Note

Any feedback is greatly appreciated! Thank you!

Reviews

[Melody]

Oh this sounds like an interesting journey. :) I loved the last two stanzas the most because when I read the second to last I was confused I was thinking "where'd the rhyme go?" Lol, but then I finished it and once again you stunned me with rhyme pattern change. :) From aa to abab. A great couplet. Good job.

[ewest1220]

Thanks! I think the original intent of this one was to make it a sonnet. But then I changed my mind just as soon as I started lol

[Melody]

Lol you're welcome.

[Pax]

very good poem. the journey towards the past regrets. great work as always.

[ewest1220]

Thanks! I'm glad you liked it!

[Erika Jones]

Awesome poem. It shows how people don't appreciate their surroundings and don't take time to bring in everything around them, that they go through life not giving everything that one look that is worth it.

[ewest1220]

Very true very true. It is a shame sometimes... Anyways lol thank you so much for reading I'm glad you enjoyed my work!

[Nath]

Beautiful poem, amazing journey, too bad everything has a limit.
Made me think of Vanitas-poetry - Everything ends, so we have to enjoy it while we can.
Great write!

[ewest1220]

Vanitas? I'm not sure if I've heard of it actually. I'll have to look it up lol thank you so much I'm really glad you enjoyed my work!

[Nath]

Vanitas was very popular in the 16th and 17th centuries, I am not sure if the term vanitas-poetry exists in English, but I thought so...
My pleasure, really.

[Brandon Mathis]

I love it man, not much to say besides that!!!

[ewest1220]

Thanks!

[Timeless-Chan]

You should feel special^_^ this was the 1st write that I added to my 'favorite' list! And i think with that you know how i feel about the peom lol:) So good job!

[ewest1220]

Sweet! I'm glad you enjoyed this and I'm thrilled I'm on your favorite list as well. So, in a nutshell, yes I do feel special ^_^

[Rox Bain ☮]

"I ran through it all and never respected
The beauty of life I would leave evermore"
This is really beautiful...

I love the message and the imagery.
Again, Well done! this is amazing ^_^

[ewest1220]

Thanks! I'm really glad you enjoyed this thank you so much for reading!

[Rox Bain ☮]

You're welcome :)

[forevermore1218]

very well written. The second verse should have a comma in between the two I am's but other then that, very nicely done.

Very nice mate :)

[ewest1220]

Ah I see, thanks for the input my friend I'm changing it now!

[Serenity Faith]

Very clever wording. Too often we speed through life, never slowing down to truly appreciate it's wonder. Another great poem ^_~

[ewest1220]

Thanks! Glad you liked it!

[Justin Flume]

Good S**t here.
You really sucked me in with this :P

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[ewest1220]

Thanks!