Slowly Melting Away

 

You'll play games in your own head,

making up scenario's

and reading all the lines.

You wrong me again and again and again.

What of my heart?

What of my soul?

You are the one chipping away,

ice pick to ice cube,

till my love and trust

become tiny slivers one day,

slowly melting away.

06/19/03

Reviews

[Craig2591]

Reality of the relationship is slowly dawning.

[Barbara Walker]

Oh, Yeah, glad I got out of that one!

[Blissful Sin]

Very meaningful and bold. Great!
-Bliss

[Barbara Walker]

Thank you!

[young501]

its great

[Barbara Walker]

thank you!

[young501]

ur welcome

[Ralphy]

You said a mouthful here.
What of my heart? What of my soul? I like the way you spill your thoughts
and try to deal what he is doing then you Cleverly use of the ice pick to ice cube.
I think this tell me alot about the writer and her emotions.

Nice write in your earlier years...you had then too.

[Silent Kim aka mizmetap..]

I like this Ice is solid and it fills it's needs, for moments at a time, but slowly it melts away and all that we trusted is now a pool of water.

Excellent write.

[Pink Poison]

This is very powerful. I like how the poem comes full circle, backwards...from your trust and love melting away, to them being left to play games in their own head. This is a great analogy and a fresh perspective on those who erode trust until nothing is left but them, alone with their games.