Losing.You.

Not really a poem as such. Just trying to piece my thoughts and emotions together. Don't hate.

It was on the way back, 

As the car cruised along the highway.

I started to drift off into the land of dreams, 

A land where my emotions are magnified tenfold. 

 

As I drifted, I saw you,

You were happy, you finally found the girl of your dreams.

I was happy for you,

As happy as a friend can ever be. 

 

But slowly, you began to drift away,

We talked less and less.

I became insignificant to you,

I became invisible to you. 

 

It got to the point where I no longer existed,

I was no longer a part of your life.

I was hurt when I realized it,

I was afraid to accept it.

 

I became broken, a lost soul,

Wandering aimlessly.

Not eating, not sleeping,

Pretending to be happy.

 

I felt like I was thrown backwards,

As though all the progress I made all disappeared.

I was even worse than I was before,

Because you were no longer there to help me.

 

When I asked you to leave the first time,

You told me no, said that I should rebuild my walls around you.

You told me to just allow you to be a part of my life,

To just trust you and to let you in.

 

I trusted you, 

I let you become a part of my life.

I depended on you,

Loved you as any friend would.

 

So when you disappeared,

I became lost and I no longer knew what to do.

I opened myself up after 10 years,

And now you've made me regret that.

 

The pain was excruciating,

And the darkness that surrounded me scared me.

I was slowly swallowed up by the pain,

And the darkness consumed me.

 

I awoke then, heart beating faster than ever,

Tears in my eyes, pain in my chest.

It was hard to breathe,

It was hard to think.

 

I texted you then,

Asked you to promise me something.

But I never asked,

I wanted to ask because I was afraid, but I was too afraid to ask.

 

I can feel it now,

That this dream is about to come true.

You will be happy, the happiest you've ever been,

And I will disappear, as of now.

Reviews

[Sherbs Dreaming Tree Of..]

This piece is just divine! I love the sense of loss that I could feel, even though it was your story, my hearts being crushed by the idea of you leaving things behind when things can be so much more beautiful in time ^^
Its been too long !

[MAC]

what a very sad poem. you wrote it to perfection

[Becca C.]

i was literally able to feel your pain in this poem. and it takes a lot for a poet to be able to write to the point where the readers feel the power. i felt your sadness and and loneliness because i too have felt that way. i lost so many people in my life just so they could be happier and it killed me. hang in there and stay strong(:

i really did love this writing though!

[mark]

wow very sad story. it was nice reading that. sorry bout what happened. People hurt u and never realize it :/ it takes time to heal just hang in there :)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

I felt bad. I almost cry. Not because your poem put me too much into the gloomy side...but because it made me remember of my past...my dark memories when I first fell in love.

"The pain was excruciating,

And the darkness that surrounded me scared me.

I was slowly swallowed up by the pain,

And the darkness consumed me."

It happened to me.
15 years earlier...I am the saddest girl on the world for losing the love and being betrayed. When i remember it, I still feel a little pain. I know it is the scar left in my heart. It can't be healed right away but I know time will come.

[zainul]

The way you narrated your story was awesome.
I was drawn into your journey,dream and other events very intimately.
It was your magical power that captivated me.
I loved your story for it was so convincing and real.

[Time's The Bond]

I thought that was really touching, slow but fast, and really sad. I love it!