ADIEU MY LOVE

ADIEU MY LOVE

A Poem by Cerise
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Its always difficult to say goodbye, but life has to move on.

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Look at me and say you blame me
Just don’t act like the jerk you normally tend to be
I am tired of pouring my heart out to you
I won’t despise you
You are like the amazing flu
You don't know how it feels 
To see you stare at me
To come back to reality
To try and have normality
The day you left without a glance
Don’t think of me
if it’s just a mischance
I know you don’t want to hurt me
Your promises are all that matters
You are my knight in shining armor
You were such a charmer
I couldn’t live without you
I am sorry if I ever hurt you
Never meant to offend you
Love me like you used to
Hug me like we were true
Kiss me so strong so that hurt would shy away
Miss those precious and amazing day
Which to you were just an easy play
True love is so rare
And it’s not always fair
But that’s why it’s called life
You are my solution to a difficult problem
Everything looked so fearsome
You are that piece of art come out of blue
You don’t know what you mean to me
Because I am sure then you would never flee
My heart and soul will pine for you
But I hope life will shine on you
I don’t want to say good bye
You know I would rather die
I don’t want to argue
You know I love you
All I can say right now is
ADIEU

© 2013 Cerise


Author's Note

Cerise
AUDIEU(means farewell or a goodbye)..review and let me know your views on it..thankyou..:)

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OH MY GOSH! THIS IS AMAZING!

I was in a situation two years ago where there was this guy and I thought I loved him. He left me for another girl after we had already been dating almost a year. He left me for a girl that treats him like crap. I didn't know what to do so I turned to another guy. He was a rebound but I thought I might actually like him. He was controlling and he cheated on me 3 times in 1 month. I was broken again. I broke up with him and I didn't know what to do after. I just wanted to die. There is this one guy though that I have known for years and he was my best friend and both of those guy's best friend. He was here for me through all of this even though it hurt him because he was in love with me. One day last year he waited with me until my mom could pick my up from the school's football game. We are both in the band. We were walking under a row of lights outside when they all turned off except for the one we were standing under. He spun me around, lifted me into the air, and kissed me. We've been practically inseperable since. We've been dating a year. I know what you are trying to express in this poem because I've felt it....twice. I love this poem. Great job.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Emily

6 Years Ago

You're welcome. I just wanted you to understand that I knew what you were trying to express in your .. read more
Emily

6 Years Ago

By the way, I like the amazing flu part. I know everyone else is saying they don't understand it and.. read more
Cerise

6 Years Ago

awww my darling...thankyou fro your such kind words..i wouldnt have removed it anywyaz but your word.. read more



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Goodbyes are always tragic...our hearts sometimes cannot stand the pain and it feels as if we are going to drop dead right there on the spot. But...it gets better. Life moves on, so long as we look at what we do have and what is possible in the future. Well done.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Cerise

5 Years Ago

Thank you :)
wow, so cool XD

Posted 6 Years Ago


Cerise

6 Years Ago

Thankyou..:)
To come back to reality
To try to have nomality

Love it! 100/100

Posted 6 Years Ago


Cerise

6 Years Ago

Thankyou..:)
This is really good! The rhyming was perfect, and I love the ending.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Cerise

6 Years Ago

Thankyou foru your kind words..:)
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Why did you choose to end every line with "..."? I use it from time to time to denote trailing off, but every single line?

these two lines confuse me:
"You are like the amazing flu…
You don't know how it feels…"

You included a ton of interesting concepts and thoughts on somebody who was special to you. If I were you I would consider using stanzas and really thinking about all of the words in some of the lines, but overall this is a good poem because it states some real-life type things

Posted 6 Years Ago


Cerise

6 Years Ago

the feeling of love..the girl can't find words to describe the feelings he makes her feel...
Ees

6 Years Ago

It might be easier to kind of say that instead, if you know what I mean.
Cerise

6 Years Ago

:)
OH MY GOSH! THIS IS AMAZING!

I was in a situation two years ago where there was this guy and I thought I loved him. He left me for another girl after we had already been dating almost a year. He left me for a girl that treats him like crap. I didn't know what to do so I turned to another guy. He was a rebound but I thought I might actually like him. He was controlling and he cheated on me 3 times in 1 month. I was broken again. I broke up with him and I didn't know what to do after. I just wanted to die. There is this one guy though that I have known for years and he was my best friend and both of those guy's best friend. He was here for me through all of this even though it hurt him because he was in love with me. One day last year he waited with me until my mom could pick my up from the school's football game. We are both in the band. We were walking under a row of lights outside when they all turned off except for the one we were standing under. He spun me around, lifted me into the air, and kissed me. We've been practically inseperable since. We've been dating a year. I know what you are trying to express in this poem because I've felt it....twice. I love this poem. Great job.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Emily

6 Years Ago

You're welcome. I just wanted you to understand that I knew what you were trying to express in your .. read more
Emily

6 Years Ago

By the way, I like the amazing flu part. I know everyone else is saying they don't understand it and.. read more
Cerise

6 Years Ago

awww my darling...thankyou fro your such kind words..i wouldnt have removed it anywyaz but your word.. read more
this is quite a wonderful piece....showing the intensity and depth..words and flow are so coherent..liked it very much.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Cerise

6 Years Ago

Thankyou for your kind words..:)
Lots of mixed feelings here,just like a typical break up. I'm finding it hard to imagine amazing flu, it always feels s**t to me! However, I like the way you challenge our usual ways of thinking about things.
Some of the grammar doesn't quite feel right to me: should amazing day be days?and you had never flee be you would never flee?

Posted 6 Years Ago


Cerise

6 Years Ago

Thankyou for your wonderful opinion...i wll edit..:)
Sounded like a spazz out at first. Then started reaching clarity toward the end. I liked the last part very much. For me, would clean up the middle, but that may take away the relief if the ending. It felt like it was time to say goodby. Not sure if that was by accident or design...? Interesting

Posted 6 Years Ago


Cerise

6 Years Ago

Thankyou for your kind words...:)

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