Feelings

feelings poured out during some terrible times.

I don't know what is going on

Life is so uncool

What the heck is wrong

Something is amiss

Something is truly gone......

The reason of my living seems to fade

There in an uncontrollable rage

I fear for the war in my heart and mind

I was always known to be sweet and kind.....

The days have changed, I feel estranged

The tears are waiting to run down my cheek

The torture and pain makes my future looks bleak

There is a stillness that gives me fright

Lord only knows what has gone wrong or right....

I hope to see a spark of life

Panache, vitality, glimmer and desire

Far away from doubts and strife

Looking at a new day with bright sunshine

Hoping that we all will one day redefine

The reason of our living and our screwed up time.....

Author's Note

please feel free to tell me your opinion

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

heartfelt and real ... the pain is palpable .. this morning when i took the dog out i got to see the super moon ... so close it seemed to almost swallow me up .. there is a balance to be struck in all this eh!? :)
E.

[Cerise]

Thank you sir....:)

[Andrea Mouser]

"my future looks bleak" - no s on Look


other than that, i love this poem :)

[Cerise]

Thank you my lady for taking time to review..:)

[Linda alexander]

Great write, excellent footing on reality, many may relate to this poem, the key is still the same as you said, every day is a new day

[Cerise]

Thank you for a wonderful review..:)

[Linda alexander]

You welcome, take care my friend

[Lethu]

'Lord only knows what has gone wrong or right'
if something has gone right....
then the above mentioned would be an adverse reaction.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

iv already reviewed this but having just reread it, i still love it.
I know how you feel life sucks sometimes... keep your head up... as hard as it is sometimes.
Still a very meaningful write, lots of emotion, and great rhymes.
Great write :)

[Cerise]

awwww..Thank you so much it truly meant alot

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Your very much welcome :)

[CriticalxxAngel]

I love the rhyme scheme in this and I think the emotions here are very clear and deep. This was a great poem

[Cerise]

Thank you soo mch

[Vidya Bacchus]

This is a nicely written poem .Your enotions come across very well.:)

[Cerise]

Thank you.....

[Vidya Bacchus]

You' re welcome:)

[Laura Harrison]

An emotional and painful poem. Very good use of rhymes in this :)

[Cerise]

Thank you..:)

[Neon]

I hate seeing someone as beautiful as you feel "Tired, Tortured and Crying" ....

I liked the theme but this's a bit personal poem of your life where you've showed the feelings of yours, the emotions of yours, the pain, the love, peace and the kindness of yours and so on everything you've penned. Transformation of feelings into the great outlines's nice and unique to analyse. Nice poem, Keep on!

[Cerise]

awwww...u still online..i thought u left this site...Thank you for your wonderful and kind words..it meant a lot..:)

[Neon]

Ha! Who the hell i am and even how can i leave the site before letting ya know!! Your an angel and i love seeing someone as gorgeous as you feel "Happy" .. Ha!

Well .. Yeah .. withing couple of weeks or at an end of the month .. i'll leave the site but don't worry, i'll mail ya when i'll be leaving these site ..

Ahh...My pleasure reading yer cool stuffs. But now don't ya think, that's too rude not to give me yer tight hugs??? where's my hugs??

[Cerise]

ahhahahahaha..awww..am soo glad i hav a frnd who thnks so much about my happiness..:P...i still dont get y u r leaving bt well ur decision i will nt ask.....manners boy..be a gentlemen...:P

[Neon]

Well .. the pleasure is all mine especially when the pleasure comes from an angel.
Ha!
Don't worry .. you can ask, i feel glad when someone as beautiful as you ask me anything, i just can't put aside by my college subjects, to make a life, to make a future bright, i've to now focus on my study much ... so, i've decided to leave the site so that i could focus on my study... but i won't forget you, you beautiful angel. By the way, i never forget beautiful angels .. after all angels love being with me, thinking of me .. so how can i break their hearts! Neah, i can never break their hearts! "(Joke)"

By the way ... you didn't give me Angel's Hug??

[Cerise]

hahahaha....aww....u can alwayz do multi tasking...true u need to focus on ur studies..u sound lyk u r studyng to b a pilot..:P...u sound like a reaaal nerdo...heheh...well am glad u wont forget me....naah u dont get a hug u r anywayz leaving me..:P....u get nothing except angle's precious teardrops..:P

[Neon]

Yeah! I wanted to do study of "Pilot" but anyhow i couldn't ..
Neah! Am not a Nerdo!

But hey! why don't I get an angel's hug???
(Don't worry, if an angels gives her warm hug .. i never hurt her)

Neah! I now much hate seeeing tears in someone eyes especially when the someone's in your suite!

[Cerise]

ehhehe...well wat do u study am seriously curious now...:P...naah...u lost the chance..may b if u had taken me out on sum nyc chtting dates i wud hav,..:P...awww...

[Neon]

Am doing study of "Speculator Course"

Neah! How you can think that "Neon" has missed or lost the chance of an angel's hug??
I never let a chance go pretty ... I've already got your hug if you do remember you stunning girl.

Anyway ... like a prince doesn't have only one princess just as same as a prince.. "Neon" hasn't only one angel to have hug, you beautiful one. There's allot of angel flying up in the sky to take a chance to get landed on me.

[Cerise]

O.o.....well umm...am nt evn gna ask wat course dat is or u making fool of me..so i shall leave it at dat for i neva heard of it befr...reaalli..wen did u gt dat..as far as i rembr u nevaaa gt a hug frm me..well all angels r unique...so every hug is diff...so u enjoy wid their hugs u wont gt frm this angel..:P

[Neon]

How can i dare to make an angel fool especially when an angel's so sexy .. oh i meant, so beautiful??
it's a course and no one can do that course cox, only multi-talented stundets're allowed to do that course as same as i am.

Oh really, you pretty!
yeah, every angel has warm and warm hugs some angels has only warm hugs but some angels've tight warm intoxicated fascinating hugs... and i know every-angel love giving me her all kinda hugs whether it's hot or cold.

O' you beautiful girl .. just remember once again, i've already taken your warm hug! LOL

[Cerise]

ehheheheh....ohh reallii....well gudluck wid watever it is.....ahahahahhahahhahahaha....i hav nooooot givn u....end of discussion..bt i noe one thng for sure..i will miss ur silly dialogues wen u leave the site...nobudy to entertain me..daym...:P

[Neon]

Boom! So, you say, you haven`t given me your hug? Why you lying, beautiful? Don`t ya remember, a few couple of hours earlier, you`ve given it to me with all of your consent. Re-play the night in your head again and find me and my words in your heart. Hope you`d remind soon what i`m talking `bout. Haha! Ah! finally, I got your hug ... don`t I? Haha! Life`s so mysterious and today, i`ve come to know myself. Haha! ;)

[Cerise]

Hehehe..well u r the king how cud i not give u anytng u asked with such sweetness..:p

[Neon]

Bam! I should`ve asked you to push you into the walls! S**t! I missed it! Anyway, someday, i`m sure.. would be drinking the drops of your sighs under the midnight xoxo (Kidding). Btw, thanks for giving me your warmth! ;)

[Cerise]

Hehehehe....y havent u slept yet...for gudness sake gt sum sleep..

[Neon]

Get some sleep? Okay.. as you say, then why don`t ya come and lie down next to me in the same bed? Yeah.. I really need some sleep now... come and run to me .. and make me sleep (kidding)

[Cerise]

Shush boy..if i neo lullaby i wud v sang nw dat i dunno u wll hav to sleep on ur own..the has risen up gt sum sleep befr a new day is upon us..

[Neon]

Bwwahh.. Whatever!